自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, verb tense and sentence structure; give a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details linked logically. Use past tense for childhood, and reduce redundancy. Also correct articles and plural/singular forms.

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I always dreamed of having one, but my parents couldn't afford to buy it for me. As a result, I still plan to buy a bike now so I can enjoy cycling in my free time.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar (articles, plural verbs), and provide specific supporting details with linking words (e.g., because, therefore). Avoid repeating the same idea twice.

示例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country. In cities like Dhaka, heavy traffic and limited parking make bikes a convenient and fast option, so many people use them to save time. For example, delivery riders and office commuters often choose bikes to avoid traffic jams.

× I don't have but I dreaming about a bike always.

✓ I didn't have one, but I was always dreaming about a bike.

The student is describing a past situation, so past tense should be used. 'I don't have' is present tense and should be 'I didn't have'. 'I dreaming' lacks correct auxiliary and form; in past continuous use 'was dreaming'. Also include 'one' after 'have' to refer to a bike and place 'always' after the verb phrase for natural word order.

× My parents don't buy me, so now I want to buy a bike.

✓ My parents didn't buy me one, so now I want to buy a bike.

The student is speaking about the past, so use past tense 'didn't buy' not 'don't buy'. 'Buy me' is awkward here; we normally say 'buy me one' when referring to a single item. Also keep tense consistent: 'didn't buy me one' then 'now I want to buy a bike' is fine.

× Yes, I think bike is popular in my country because Dhaka is a very popular traffic area so everyone use bike for maintain their time.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because Dhaka has very heavy traffic, so everyone uses bikes to save time.

This sentence has several present-tense and agreement errors. Use plural 'bikes are' when speaking generally. 'Dhaka is a very popular traffic area' is unnatural; use 'has very heavy traffic'. 'Everyone use' should be 'everyone uses' (subject-verb agreement). 'Use bike for maintain their time' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'use bikes to save time' (infinitive purpose and plural agreement).

× So bike is popular in my country.

✓ So bikes are popular in my country.

When making a general statement about all bikes, use the plural subject 'bikes' and the plural verb 'are'. 'Bike is' sounds like referring to a single bike; 'bikes are popular' correctly expresses the general idea.