自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: You answered directly and included some details, but your response has disfluencies (many 'uh', repetitions), a factual inconsistency (having a bike at six but learning at nine needs clarification), and some awkward phrasing. To improve: 1) Remove filler words and avoid repeating phrases. 2) Make the timeline consistent and clear (explain why you had a bike before you learned to ride). 3) Use one or two linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'but' or 'however'). 4) Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences).

示例: Yes, I did. I got a bike when I was about six, but I only learned to ride it at nine because my parents wanted me to be older before I practised on the street. It was fun overall, although I felt nervous at first. However, after a few lessons I became much more confident.

建议: You gave a direct yes but the answer trails off and contains many fillers and an unfinished reason. To improve: 1) Finish your thought with a clear reason why you no longer ride. 2) Use specific examples and a linking word (for example, 'for instance' or 'however') to make the statement coherent. 3) Reduce filler words and avoid leaving sentences incomplete. 4) Aim for two to three supporting details (who uses bikes, why they are popular, and your personal situation).

示例: Yes, definitely. Bikes are still common in Vietnam: for instance, teenagers often use them to go to school and older people use them for short errands. However, I don't ride much now because I usually commute by motorbike or bus, which is faster in the city.

× I had a bike when I was about uh, six years old.

✓ I had a bike when I was about six years old.

Remove filler words like 'uh' inside the sentence for clarity; grammatically the past simple 'had' is correct for a past possession. Suggestion: avoid disfluencies in speaking and in writing.

× I started to learn how to bike when I was about nine years old.

✓ I started learning how to ride a bike when I was about nine years old.

Use 'started learning' (verb + -ing) to follow 'started' when indicating the beginning of an action. Also use 'ride a bike' rather than 'bike' as a verb for natural English. Suggestion: after 'start' prefer either 'to' + base verb or verb+'-ing' consistently; here '-ing' is more natural.

× It was quite fun uh, but uh, at the first time uh, I was quite nervous to uh, learn how to, to ride a bike.

✓ It was quite fun, but at first I was quite nervous to learn how to ride a bike.

Replace 'at the first time' with 'at first' for idiomatic expression. Remove repeated words and fillers. The structure 'nervous to learn' is acceptable, though 'nervous about learning' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'nervous about learning to ride a bike' for smoother phrasing.

× Yes, definitely uh, if you uh, travel on the road, you'll see that lots of Vietnamese people uh, ride a bike uh, for example, uh, teenagers or old people uh, at present I don't umm, ride a bike anymore because uh, I often.

✓ Yes, definitely. If you travel on the road, you'll see that many Vietnamese people ride bikes, for example teenagers and elderly people. At present I don't ride a bike anymore because I often...

Multiple issues: replace 'lots of' with 'many' or keep 'lots of'—both acceptable; 'ride a bike' pluralized to 'ride bikes' for general statement. 'Old people' is better as 'elderly people'. The sentence fragment 'because I often.' is incomplete—needs completion (e.g., 'because I often travel by motorbike'). Suggestion: finish the reason clause and avoid fillers; use full sentences separated by periods.