自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence about having a bike, then give specific supporting details (when you rode, why you still need training wheels, and any attempts to learn). Use linking words to connect ideas and correct tense/grammar (e.g., ‘I enjoyed’ for past habitual actions; ‘a couple of years ago’). Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences).

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to enjoy riding it every afternoon around my neighborhood. However, it always had a training wheel, so I never learned to ride without support. I tried to learn a couple of years ago, but it was difficult because I lacked balance and confidence.

建议: Answer directly and give specific reasons and examples. Start with a clear statement about popularity, then explain with 2–3 specific reasons (commuting, clubs, environment). Use linking words (for example, however, because). Avoid incomplete sentences and vague phrases (finish ideas like the sunscreen point).

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many people cycle to work or join morning riding groups, especially in cities with bike lanes. However, I don't cycle regularly because it can be tiring and the weather is often hot and humid, so people need sunscreen and protective clothing.

× Yes I did. I enjoy riding my bike in the afternoon.

✓ Yes, I did. I enjoyed riding my bike in the afternoons.

The examiner asked about a past situation ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense to describe habitual past actions. Change 'enjoy' (present) to 'enjoyed' (past). Also use the plural 'afternoons' for habitual actions. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and add commas after introductory words.'

× Unfortunately I have a training wheel so without it I cannot ride a bike.

✓ Unfortunately, I had a training wheel, so without it I could not ride a bike.

This sentence refers to the past, so verbs should be in the past tense: 'have' -> 'had' and 'cannot' -> 'could not'. Add a comma after 'Unfortunately'. Also 'a training wheel' is correct but the tense must match the time frame. Suggestion: match verb tenses to the time being discussed.'

× I tried though learning about how to ride a bike maybe couple years ago, but unfortunately it is very difficult for me.

✓ I did try to learn how to ride a bike a couple of years ago, but unfortunately it was very difficult for me.

Multiple issues: use past auxiliary 'did try' or simple past 'tried' with correct verb patterns: 'try to learn' instead of 'tried learning about'. Include 'a' before 'couple' -> 'a couple of years ago'. The result clause should be past tense 'was' not present 'is' because it refers to that past attempt. Suggestion: use correct past tense and common collocations: 'try to learn' and 'a couple of years ago.' '

× Yes, I do believe so.

✓ Yes, I believe so.

While not strictly wrong, using 'do' for emphasis in present simple is unnecessary in this context. It is more natural to say 'I believe so.' Suggestion: omit unnecessary auxiliary 'do' unless adding emphasis.'

× There are different and various communities of bike riders who do it every morning, but unfortunately I am not one of them because it is very tiring at the same time or weather is very humid.

✓ There are various communities of cyclists who ride every morning, but unfortunately I am not one of them because it is tiring and the weather is often very humid.

Problems: 'different and various' is redundant; choose one ('various'). 'Bike riders who do it' is vague; use 'cyclists who ride'. 'At the same time or weather is very humid' is ungrammatical and awkward. Replace with clear causal reasons: 'it is tiring and the weather is often very humid.' Also use consistent tense and natural vocabulary. Suggestion: avoid redundancy and broken clauses; combine reasons with 'and' and use clear nouns.'

× So riding a bike requires you to have a lot of sunscreen and a.

✓ So riding a bike requires you to have a lot of sunscreen and a hat.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and a.' It needs a noun after 'a'—common items are 'a hat' or 'a water bottle'. Also 'requires you to have a lot of sunscreen' is acceptable but could be 'requires plenty of sunscreen' for naturalness. Suggestion: complete the list and choose appropriate quantifiers such as 'a lot of' or 'plenty of' consistently.'