自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases (e.g., “important to study”). Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood and limit to 3–4 sentences for clarity.

示例: Yes, I did. I had a blue bicycle from the age of seven and I rode it to school every day. Because I rode it regularly, it helped me stay fit and improved my stamina. Also, cycling was a fun way to spend time with my friends.

建议: Answer directly, use correct forms and clearer logic. Begin with a topic sentence stating whether bikes are popular, then give 2 specific supporting points with linking words (for example, cost and convenience). Avoid contradictory phrasing and incorrect quantifiers (e.g., “a lot of public bike” → “many public bikes”).

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many cities have public bike-sharing systems that are inexpensive to use, usually costing only about $1.50 for a short ride. As a result, people use bikes for short journeys because they are cheap, convenient and reduce traffic congestion.

× Yeah, of course I have a bike.

✓ Yeah, of course I had a bike.

The examiner asked about having a bike 'when you were a child' (past). The verb should be in past tense. Using 'have' (present) is incorrect for that time frame. Change to 'had' to agree with the past reference and maintain consistent tense.

× When in my childhood.

✓ When I was a child.

The original fragment 'When in my childhood.' is incomplete and ungrammatical. It lacks a proper subject-verb structure. Replace with the full clause 'When I was a child' to clearly express the time reference.

× I think bike is very important to study because it can make my body more healthy and I can do a lot of exercises by a bike.

✓ I think a bike is very important in childhood because it can make my body healthier and I can get a lot of exercise by riding a bike.

Multiple issues: missing article before 'bike' (use 'a bike'); 'to study' is contextually wrong—use 'in childhood' or 'when you are a child'; 'more healthy' is nonstandard comparative—use 'healthier'; 'a lot of exercises' should be 'a lot of exercise' (uncountable) or 'many exercises'; 'by a bike' is awkward—use 'by riding a bike'. These changes correct article use, adjective/adverb form, and collocations.

× It can improve our physical health.

✓ It can improve our physical health.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'It' refers to 'a bike' and 'our' is a valid general pronoun. No change needed.

× Yeah, of course you can see a lot of public bike in the street and you just only need to pay 1.5 dollars for it so you can't use it all day.

✓ Yeah, of course you can see a lot of public bikes in the streets and you only need to pay 1.5 dollars to use one, but you can't use it all day.

Errors fixed: 'public bike' should be plural 'public bikes' to match 'a lot of'; 'in the street' is better as 'in the streets' for general observation; 'you just only need' is redundant—use 'you only need'; 'pay 1.5 dollars for it' is awkward—use 'pay 1.5 dollars to use one'; added conjunction 'but' to clarify contrast. These corrections address number agreement, redundancy, preposition and phrasing.

× So I think bike is very cheap in China because everyone needs it and is a very common transport.

✓ So I think bikes are very cheap in China because everyone needs them and they are a very common form of transport.

Problems: 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match general statement; verb agreement needs plural 'are'; pronoun 'it' should be 'them' to refer to 'bikes'; 'is a very common transport' is awkward — use 'they are a very common form of transport' or 'a very common means of transport'. These changes fix subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference.