自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and clear: start with a simple topic sentence, then give 2–3 precise supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words. Fix basic grammar (past tense: bought, rode; vocabulary: ride, not write or riot) and avoid filler sounds. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for me when I was in elementary school, and I used to ride it to school almost every day. I often rode with my sister, and we enjoyed exploring the neighborhood together.

建议: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words (for example, because, also, moreover). Use appropriate vocabulary (cheaper, economical, cyclists, ride) and avoid fillers. Provide one concrete example or brief consequence to support your point.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheaper than cars and affordable for many people. Also, bicycles are practical for short trips and help save money on fuel. For example, many students and shopkeepers ride bikes to work or school every day.

× I do. I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I did have a bike when I was a child.

The student begins with 'I do.' which is unnecessary and conflicts with the past context. The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the simple past 'I did have a bike when I was a child.' is correct. Remove the extraneous present-tense 'I do.' to maintain correct tense consistency. Suggestion: Use only the past tense form when referring to past situations: 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× Uh, my mum buy it when I was umm, in craft once

✓ Uh, my mum bought it when I was, um, in grade one.

The verb 'buy' is in base form; the sentence refers to a single past event, so the past simple 'bought' is required. Also 'in craft once' is unclear; likely intended to indicate a school grade or time. Replace with a clear past-time phrase such as 'in grade one' or 'when I was young.' Suggestion: Use past simple for completed past actions: 'My mum bought it when I was in first grade.'

× and I used to write to my, my, to my old school, my, uh, elementary school and I used to umm, riot and put my sister.

✓ and I used to ride it to my old elementary school, and I used to ride with my sister.

Multiple issues: 'write' is incorrect verb choice; context implies 'ride'. 'Ride it to my old elementary school' is the proper phrase. 'Riot' is a wrong word (means violent public disorder) and should be 'ride'. The clause 'and put my sister' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'ride with my sister.' Suggestion: Use correct verbs and clear structure: 'I used to ride it to my old elementary school, and I used to ride with my sister.'

× I think bike is popular in my country, it's because it cheap and also everyone like to ride it because uh, of the economic in our country and it's really fun to write to and I think sport people like to riot.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country. It's because they are cheap, and also everyone likes to ride them because of the economy in our country. It's really fun to ride, and I think sporty people like to ride.

Multiple errors corrected while focusing on singular/plural and agreement: 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. 'It cheap' needs verb and plural agreement: 'they are cheap.' 'Everyone like' should be 'everyone likes' (subject-verb agreement with singular indefinite pronoun). 'Ride it' becomes 'ride them' to match plural. 'Of the economic' is incorrect phrase; 'because of the economy' or 'because of economic reasons' is correct. 'Write' and 'riot' are wrong word choices and replaced with 'ride'. 'Sport people' is awkward; 'sporty people' or 'athletes' is better. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general statements and correct subject-verb agreement: 'Bikes are popular... they are cheap... everyone likes to ride them.'