自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammatical accuracy and natural phrasing. Give a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy and keep it within 3–4 sentences. For example, use past tense consistently and a better verb than 'lay'.

示例: Yes, I did. I rode my bicycle to school almost every day when I was a child because my school was only a ten-minute ride away. Riding gave me independence and helped me stay active.

建议: Focus on clarity, coherence and accurate vocabulary. Start with a clear opinion, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'therefore'). Avoid filler sounds and incomplete sentences; use correct nouns ('roads' not 'load') and explain how that affects car use.

示例: Yes, I do. Bicycles are quite popular in Japan because many cities have narrow roads and excellent cycling infrastructure, so people often prefer bikes for short trips. Therefore, fewer people use cars for daily errands in those areas.

× 'I always lay the bike because I go to school by bike.'

✓ 'I always ride the bike because I go to school by bike.'

'lay' is incorrect here because it means to place something down. When referring to travelling using a bicycle, the correct verb is 'ride' followed by the object. Use 'ride the bike' or simply 'ride my bike'. Suggestion: use 'I always rode my bike' if referring to past habitual action, or 'I always ride my bike' for general/habitual present.

× 'I always lay the bike because I go to school by bike.'

✓ 'I always rode my bike because I went to school by bike.'

'Examiner asked about childhood (past). The student used present tense 'always' with 'go' which mismatches the past context. For a past habitual action, use past tense: 'I always rode my bike because I went to school by bike.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent with the time frame mentioned (childhood).

× 'Japan has a tiny load so Japanese can't. Use the car.'

✓ 'Japan has very narrow roads so Japanese people can't use cars.'

'load' is likely a wrong word choice for 'roads'. Also 'use the car' is unnatural; use plural 'cars' or 'use cars'. Preposition/word choice: 'narrow roads' fits the intended meaning. Also 'Japanese' as noun should be 'Japanese people' in this context. Remove the stray period and make it one sentence.

× 'Japan has a tiny load so Japanese can't. Use the car.'

✓ 'Japan has very narrow roads so Japanese people can't use cars.'

'Japanese' used alone can be an adjective or a noun meaning people, but in this sentence 'Japanese people' is clearer. Also the sentence had an unnecessary period breaking the clause. Combine into a single sentence and use plural 'cars' to match general statement.