自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, verb tenses and word choice; make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, correct verbs (had, bought, learned, rode), avoid incorrect words like “write” for “ride,” and limit to about 3–4 sentences. Add one specific detail (where you rode or how old you were) and use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mum bought it for my birthday, and at first I didn’t know how to ride, but my dad taught me in the park when I was six. After a few lessons I learned quickly and soon rode it confidently around my neighborhood.

建议: Clarify your opinion and correct contradictions. Decide whether bikes are popular or not and state it clearly. Use linking words (however, because) and give specific reasons and an example. Fix grammar (e.g., “I don't think bikes are very popular,” “public transportation is convenient,” “people drive their own cars”). Keep answer to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I don't think bikes are very popular in Hong Kong. Because public transportation is very convenient and efficient, most people prefer trains and buses; as a result, cycling is less common except in parks or on the outlying islands.

× Yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asked about possession in the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the response should use past tense. Using 'do have' is present-tense and mismatches the time reference. Suggestion: match the tense of the question by using past simple ('had').

× When I was a kid my mum brought it for me as a birthday gift.

✓ When I was a kid, my mum bought it for me as a birthday present.

The verb 'brought' implies carrying something to a location, while 'bought' (past of 'buy') is correct when describing purchasing a gift. Also 'birthday present' is more idiomatic than 'birthday gift' though both are acceptable; adding a comma after the introductory clause improves readability. Suggestion: use 'bought' for purchase actions and add a comma after introductory time phrases.

× At first I didn't know how to write it at all, but then after my professional dad taught me how to write it, I caught up really quickly and I ride it confidently.

✓ At first I didn't know how to ride it at all, but after my dad taught me, I caught on really quickly and rode it confidently.

The student repeatedly used 'write' instead of 'ride' which is a wrong verb choice; 'caught up' is less natural here than 'caught on' for learning a skill; tense consistency requires past simple ('rode') to match the past narrative. 'Professional' before 'dad' is unnecessary and awkward. Suggestion: use the verb 'ride' for bicycles, use 'caught on' when describing learning, and keep past tense consistent throughout the story.

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country? Student: No, I don't think riding a bike.

✓ No, I don't think riding bikes is popular.

The original reply is fragmentary and ungrammatical. 'I don't think riding a bike' lacks a predicate and does not answer the question. Recast the sentence to state the opinion about the activity or the subject ('riding bikes is popular'). Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'riding bikes is popular.' Suggestion: provide a full clause expressing the opinion, e.g. 'I don't think riding bikes is popular.'

× It's popular in my country because in Hong Kong everyone uses the public transportation because of its convenient and otherwise people drive their own car.

✓ It's not popular in my country because in Hong Kong everyone uses public transportation since it is convenient; otherwise, people drive their own cars.

Multiple issues: the sentence contradicted the previous negative; 'the public transportation' should be 'public transportation' (no article), 'its convenient' needs 'it is' and 'convenient' as adjective, and 'car' should be plural ('cars') when speaking generally. Also logical connectors: use 'since' or 'because' once and 'otherwise' with a comma. Suggestion: remove unnecessary article before 'public transportation,' use 'it is' or 'it's' for clarity, and pluralize general nouns ('cars').