学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and use a more natural phrase such as “a third-year student” and “majoring in Agroforestry.” You could add one brief reason or comment about your subject to make the answer more developed, while keeping it within two sentences.

示例: I’m a third-year university student majoring in Agroforestry. I chose this field because I’m interested in protecting forests and promoting sustainable farming.

建议: The answer is direct, but it would sound more natural with the name of the university introduced as a proper noun and correct punctuation. Add a short descriptive detail, such as its location or campus environment, to make the response more informative.

示例: I study at Newba Viscan State University. It’s located in Wesbo Visaya, and the campus has a relaxed atmosphere surrounded by trees and open spaces.

建议: Give a clear overall opinion first, then support it with one or two specific reasons. The contrast with private schools is understandable, but “for some people if money is not a problem” is awkward; use “if money isn’t an issue.” Also, explain why your university is good instead of focusing mainly on private schools.

示例: Yes, I think it’s a good place to study, especially for students in Wesbo Visaya. The tuition fees are affordable, and the university offers useful courses in agriculture and forestry. However, students with more money might prefer a private school because it may have better facilities.

建议: State the changes you would like clearly and avoid repeating the correction “doesn’t does not.” Use “many departments don’t have enough professors,” and say “especially my department” rather than “and especially in my department.” You could also mention the result of the problem, such as larger classes or fewer available courses.

示例: Yes, I’d like my university to hire more professors, especially in my department. At the moment, there aren’t enough teachers, so some classes are overcrowded and students may not receive enough individual attention.

建议: Use the plural verb “are” with “plans,” and keep the sequence grammatically parallel: “graduate,” “take,” and “apply.” Add linking words such as “after that” and specify the type of job you hope to get. Avoid the incomplete phrase “planning to apply and work.”

示例: My future study plans are to graduate from my course and take the board exam. After that, I plan to apply for a job in agroforestry, preferably with an environmental organization or a government agency.

× Well, for us here in Wesbo Visaya, it is still a good place to study. But for some people if money is not a problem then they should enroll in private school.

✓ Well, for us here in Wesbo Visaya, it is still a good place to study. However, if money is not a problem for some people, they should enroll in a private school.

Private school is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a private school when referring to one private school in general. The sentence is also clearer when the if-clause is placed before the main clause and separated with a comma.

× Yes, I would like the place where I am studying to make any changes because I observe that many departments doesn't does not have enough professors to teach students and especially in my department.

✓ Yes, I would like the place where I am studying to make some changes because I observe that many departments do not have enough professors to teach students, especially in my department.

The subject many departments is plural, so it must take the plural auxiliary do, not does. The correct negative form is do not. The duplicated forms doesn't does not must also be reduced to one form. Make some changes is more natural than make any changes in this affirmative sentence.

× My future study plans is to graduate from this course and take my board exam and then after that planning to apply and work.

✓ My future study plans are to graduate from this course, take my board exam, and then plan to apply for a job and work.

The subject plans is plural, so the verb must be are, not is. The verbs after are should be parallel: to graduate, take, and plan. Planning does not match the structure of the other verbs. Also, apply for a job is the appropriate expression when referring to seeking employment.