学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng còn lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ. Nên dùng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn rồi bổ sung thông tin hỗ trợ, tránh lặp cấu trúc "I am" liên tiếp và sửa lỗi thì tương lai (will start enrolling -> will enroll). Thêm liên từ để mạch lạc.

示例: I’m currently a high school student in my final year. Next year I plan to enroll at university to continue my studies.

建议: Câu trả lời không tự nhiên, có lỗi ngữ pháp và câu không hoàn chỉnh ("It is and I felt..."). Cần một câu chủ đề trực tiếp (nơi học), theo sau bởi chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ tên tỉnh hoặc đặc điểm). Sử dụng thì phù hợp và tránh lỗi động từ (comfortable studying).

示例: I study at a provincial high school in [Your Province]. I feel comfortable there because the teachers are supportive and the classrooms are well-equipped.

建议: Trả lời rõ ràng, có lý do hỗ trợ nhưng có lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp và cấu trúc ("teachers that really friendly" -> "teachers who are really friendly"). Nên nối các ý bằng liên từ để mạch lạc hơn và giới hạn độ dài dưới 5 câu.

示例: Yes, I think it’s a good place to study. Although it’s not a famous school, the support services are excellent and the teachers are really friendly, so combined with modern facilities it’s very comfortable for learning.

建议: Ý kiến rõ ràng nhưng có tiếng ngập ngừng và dùng đại từ không nhất quán (my school -> their). Cần dùng ngôn ngữ mạch lạc hơn, tránh tiếng ừ/um, và cụ thể hoá những cải tiến mong muốn (ví dụ số lượng phòng hoặc thiết bị).

示例: I would like my school to improve its infrastructure. For example, I hope they can build a new facility with specialized classrooms for science and physics, plus dedicated studios for art and music.

建议: Câu trả lời không phù hợp với câu hỏi (trả lời lặp lại ý về cơ sở vật chất thay vì kế hoạch tương lai). Có nhiều lỗi: từ bị viết sai (Scone), ngập ngừng, và ngữ pháp (child lab?). Cần trả lời trực tiếp về kế hoạch học tập tương lai (ngành học, dự định đại học, nghề nghiệp) và chỉ thêm ngắn gọn lý do.

示例: I plan to apply to university next year to study Biology because I’m interested in research and healthcare. After my degree, I hope to pursue a master’s in medical sciences and eventually work in a clinical laboratory.

× Now I am a student, I am studying in the final years of high school and next year I will start enrolling in university.

✓ Now I am a student; I am in the final year of high school, and next year I will start enrolling in university.

The original mixes plural 'years' with 'final' and has slightly awkward structure. Use 'the final year' (singular) for a single concluding year of high school and join clauses with proper punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: use semicolon or conjunctions to separate related ideas and ensure subject-verb consistency. Note: explanation in English as requested.

× I am studying in a high school in my province. It is and I felt comfortable to studying in this school.

✓ I am studying at a high school in my province. It is comfortable, and I feel comfortable studying at this school.

Problems: incorrect preposition ('in' vs 'at' for school), mixed tenses ('felt' vs present 'am studying') and incorrect use of 'to studying' (infinitive/gerund). Use 'at' for attending a school, keep present tense 'feel' to match 'am studying', and use gerund 'studying' without 'to'. Note: explanation in English as requested.

× I would say yes. It is not a famous school in my country but the support services are excellent and also the teachers that really friendly.

✓ I would say yes. It is not a famous school in my country, but the support services are excellent and the teachers are really friendly.

Missing verb 'are' before 'really friendly' causes ungrammatical clause. Also add a comma before 'but' for clarity. Ensure predicate 'are' links subject 'teachers' to adjective 'friendly'. Note: explanation in English as requested.

× Their campus has modern facilities so I find it's a comfortable place to study.

✓ The campus has modern facilities, so I find it a comfortable place to study.

Use 'the campus' (definite article) rather than 'their' in this context for clarity; contraction 'it's' is acceptable but 'it a comfortable' is more formal. Add comma before 'so'. Maintain present tense 'find'. Note: explanation in English as requested.

× In my opinion, I would like my school to, uh, improve their infrastructure. I want to have a building which includes rooms for other subjects like science, physics or umm, art, music.

✓ In my opinion, I would like my school to improve its infrastructure. I want a building that includes rooms for subjects such as science, physics, art, and music.

Use 'its' rather than 'their' because 'school' is a singular noun. Remove filler 'uh/umm' and simplify wording. Use 'that' for defining relative clause and 'such as' or 'and' for lists; include commas appropriately. Note: explanation in English as requested.

× In my opinion, I would like my Scone to improve its infrastructure. I would like to have a building that has specialized classrooms and child lab uh, as well as studio spaces for art and music because having proper facility would make practical lessons much more effective.

✓ In my opinion, I would like my school to improve its infrastructure. I would like a building that has specialized classrooms and a child lab, as well as studio spaces for art and music, because having proper facilities would make practical lessons much more effective.

Multiple issues: 'Scone' is a typo for 'school'; use 'school'. Use 'a child lab' with article 'a'. Use plural 'facilities' to match context. Add commas for clarity and remove filler 'uh'. Maintain present conditional structure 'would make'. Note: explanation in English as requested.