学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer concise, grammatically correct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence (I am a student), then add one brief supporting detail (grade and stream). Avoid unnecessary words and correct place names and prepositions. Use linking words if adding a second detail.

示例: I am a student. I'm in Grade 12 at Indus Public School in Jind, Haryana, and I study in the science stream because I am more interested in mathematics.

建议: Give a direct clear answer and correct factual details. Use one or two sentences: state the school and a brief background if relevant. Use correct prepositions and verb forms (I was admitted / I studied). Avoid unclear place names or confusing chronology.

示例: I study at Indus Public School in Jind, Haryana. I joined this school in Grade 12 after completing Grade 11 at an international school.

建议: Answer directly and avoid repetition and fillers. Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons using linking words (for example, because / for instance). Mention concrete examples of why it is good and avoid vague names or stutters.

示例: Yes, it is a good place to study because most teachers are well qualified. For example, many of them also teach at local coaching centres and they regularly help us by answering our doubts.

建议: Respond with a clear suggestion and specific details about the problem and its effect. Use correct tense and plural forms, and link cause and effect (because / so / therefore). Mention one or two concrete improvements and how they would help students.

示例: Yes, I would improve the infrastructure. For instance, many air conditioners are broken, so classrooms become very hot in summer and this distracts students; repairing or replacing them would make learning more comfortable.

建议: Give a clear statement of your plans and one or two specific details: the country, university and course. Use natural phrasing and correct word order (focus on / apply to). You can add a brief reason for your choice to make the answer richer.

示例: I plan to study abroad. I am aiming to study a Bachelor of Computer Science with a focus on Artificial Intelligence at the University of Adelaide in Australia because they have strong AI research and good industry links.

× I'm a student studying in grade 12 in Jin, Haryana in Indus public school with choosing science stream spatially match as my interests are more in maths.

✓ I'm a student studying in grade 12 in Jin, Haryana, at Indus Public School, and I have chosen the science stream because my interests are more in maths.

Incorrect prepositions ('in Indus public school' -> 'at Indus Public School') and awkward phrasing ('with choosing' and 'spatially match'). Use 'at' for schools, 'chosen' for selecting a stream, and 'because' to show reason. Also capitalize proper nouns and reorder for clarity. Suggestions: Use 'at' for locations like schools, use correct past participle 'chosen', and connect clauses with 'because' or 'since'.

× I'm a grade 12 student in Indus public school, Jean, Haryana. I took admission in this school in my class 12 only and I studied 11th from sicker Europe in International School.

✓ I'm a grade 12 student at Indus Public School, Jin, Haryana. I was admitted to this school in class 12 only, and I studied grade 11 at a different international school in Sikkar or elsewhere.

Preposition errors: use 'at' for schools, 'admitted to' rather than 'took admission in', and 'studied grade 11 at' rather than 'studied 11th from'. The original also contains unclear place names ('sicker Europe') which likely need correction; provide a plausible structure. Suggestions: Use 'was admitted to' for passive admission, 'in class 12' to show timing, and 'at' for institutions.

× Yeah, it is a good place as many teachers are qualified, almost every teacher are qualified and uh, they teach in many institutes, coaching institutes like Pai, uh, B plus U and uh, they take our doubts also.

✓ Yes, it is a good place because many teachers are qualified; almost every teacher is qualified, and they teach at many coaching institutes, such as Pai and B Plus U, and they also help clear our doubts.

Subject-verb agreement: 'every teacher are' should be 'every teacher is' because 'every' takes singular verb. Preposition 'in many institutes' should be 'at many institutes'. 'Take our doubts' is non-idiomatic; use 'help clear our doubts'. Suggestions: Ensure singular verbs after 'every' or 'each', use 'at' for institutions, and use natural collocations like 'help clear doubts'.

× Yes, some infrastructure changes I would like to make in my school, because the management did not worked as much at infrastructure in summer, some ACS are not working properly which interrupts students to study properly in their classes.

✓ Yes, I would like to make some infrastructure changes at my school because the management did not work enough on infrastructure over the summer. Some ACs are not working properly, which interrupts students and prevents them from studying effectively in class.

Past tense and verb form errors: 'did not worked' is incorrect; use 'did not work' or 'has not worked'. Preposition use: 'at infrastructure' should be 'on infrastructure'. 'ACS' should be 'ACs' and 'interrupts students to study' should be 'interrupts students and prevents them from studying'. Suggestions: Use simple past 'did not work' for completed actions and 'prevent from' for describing obstruction.

× In my future, I want to study abroad, especially I focused on University of Adelaide, Australia choosing Bachelors of Computer Science Engineering in Artificial Intelligence as my career.

✓ In the future, I want to study abroad; in particular, I am focusing on the University of Adelaide in Australia to pursue a Bachelor of Computer Science and Engineering with a specialization in Artificial Intelligence.

Tense and verb form: 'I focused on' is past; use present continuous 'I am focusing on' to indicate current plans. Article and noun form: 'Bachelors of Computer Science Engineering' should be 'a Bachelor of Computer Science and Engineering' and 'choosing' is awkward; use 'to pursue' or 'with a specialization in'. Suggestions: Use 'in the future' or 'I plan to', use correct degree names and 'specialization' for fields like AI.