学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện độ mạch lạc và ngữ pháp: tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: "foundational foundational", "finance finance"), loại bỏ tiếng 'uh' không cần thiết và hoàn chỉnh cấu trúc câu. Nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích ngắn gọn lý do học chọn ngành (tối đa 3 câu hỗ trợ). Chú ý chia động từ và giới từ (ví dụ: "study foundational courses in accounting and finance" thay vì "still study find fun").

示例: I'm a university student at the Academy of Finance. I'm currently studying foundational courses in accounting and finance because I plan to become an accountant. I enjoy the subjects because they help me understand financial systems and develop practical skills.

建议: Cải thiện phát âm và từ vựng chính xác; loại bỏ tiếng lặp và sửa lỗi từ (ví dụ: 'young food atmosphere' không đúng — có lẽ muốn nói 'young, friendly atmosphere'). Trình bày câu rõ ràng: bắt đầu với vị trí, sau đó nêu một hoặc hai lý do cụ thể vì sao thích trường. Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu, dùng liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'which' để liên kết ý.

示例: I study at the Academy of Finance in northern Vietnam. I really like it because it has a young, friendly atmosphere and offers many valuable learning opportunities. The campus provides events and career services that help students prepare for work.

建议: Sắp xếp ý rõ ràng và sửa ngữ pháp, loại bỏ lặp ("library, library"). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề khẳng định rồi liệt kê 2-3 điểm cụ thể với liên từ hợp lý. Chú ý mạo từ và tính từ ("a well-equipped library", "a quiet environment", "free Wi-Fi").

示例: Yes, absolutely. It has a well-equipped library and spacious group study rooms, which make it easy to concentrate. The quiet environment and free Wi-Fi are also very helpful for studying.

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và từ vựng chính xác: sửa lỗi từ ('compass' → 'campus'), tránh lặp, và dùng đại từ đúng ('study there effectively' thay vì 'study their effectively'). Nên nêu một câu chủ đề kèm theo 1-2 ví dụ ngắn minh họa.

示例: I wouldn't ask for many changes because the campus is quiet and the facilities are modern. For example, the classrooms are comfortable and the library is well-equipped, so I can study there effectively.

建议: Làm rõ cấu trúc và sửa ngữ pháp: dùng 'profession' đúng và sửa lỗi số liệu ("offers financial stability" hoặc "financial security"). Viết câu chủ đề ngắn gọn rồi giải thích lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: công việc ổn định, cơ hội thăng tiến). Hạn chế câu dài, dùng linking words như 'because' hoặc 'so'.

示例: My plan is to study accounting so I can become an accountant at a large company. I want this career because it offers financial stability and good opportunities for career advancement.

× I am currently a university student at the Academy of Finance. I mainly still study find fun uh foundational foundational courses in accounting and finance finance because I want to become an accountant in the.

✓ I am currently a university student at the Academy of Finance. I mainly still study foundational courses in accounting and finance because I want to become an accountant.

The student mixed filler words and repeated words and used unnatural phrasing. The main verb 'study' is correct in present tense for current actions, but 'study find fun' is ungrammatical and 'foundational' was repeated. Simplify to 'study foundational courses' to convey meaning clearly. Remove fillers and unnecessary repetitions. Suggestion: Practice forming concise sentences: 'I study foundational courses in accounting and finance.'

× Uh I study at the Academy of Finance, uh, University in the Northern Vietnam. I really like it because it offers a young food atmosphere in many valuable learning experience and opportunity in the career future.

✓ I study at the Academy of Finance, a university in northern Vietnam. I really like it because it offers a young, friendly atmosphere and many valuable learning experiences and opportunities for my future career.

Preposition use and article use were incorrect: say 'in northern Vietnam' (no 'the') and 'a university' rather than 'University' as a descriptor. 'Food' was likely intended to be 'friendly' or 'good' and 'learning experience' should be plural 'learning experiences'. 'Opportunity in the career future' is incorrect collocation; use 'opportunities for my future career.' Suggestion: Learn common prepositional phrases like 'in northern Vietnam' and collocations like 'opportunities for a future career.'

× Yes, absolutely. There are many great places to study such as well equipped library, library and spacious group study rooms which make it easy to focus the quiet environment and free Wi-Fi rate of.

✓ Yes, absolutely. There are many great places to study such as a well-equipped library and spacious group study rooms, which make it easy to focus because of the quiet environment and free Wi-Fi.

Missing articles: use 'a well-equipped library' not 'well equipped library'. Repetition 'library, library' removed. The clause needed 'which make it easy to focus because of the quiet environment' to be grammatical. 'Wi-Fi rate of' is incorrect; intended 'free Wi-Fi.' Suggestion: Use articles before singular countable nouns and ensure relative clauses clearly link reason and result.

× I couldn't ask the university to change much because the compass Compass is quiet and the facilities are modern. For example, the classrooms are comfortable and the library is well equipped so I feel I can study their effectively.

✓ I couldn't ask the university to change much because the campus is quiet and the facilities are modern. For example, the classrooms are comfortable and the library is well equipped, so I feel I can study there effectively.

Pronoun and word choice errors: 'compass Compass' should be 'campus'. 'Their' is incorrect pronoun for place; use 'there'. Added comma before 'so' for clarity. Suggestion: Distinguish between 'their' (possessive) and 'there' (place) and proofread for misspelled words.

× My future study plan is to study accounting so I can become an accountant at a large company. I want this because the professions offers financials, stability and good career prospects.

✓ My future study plan is to study accounting so I can become an accountant at a large company. I want this because the profession offers financial stability and good career prospects.

Subject-verb agreement and word form: use singular 'profession' (or better: 'this profession') with singular verb 'offers'. 'Financials' is incorrect; use 'financial stability' as a noun phrase. Suggestion: Use correct noun forms and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'the profession offers.'