学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, ngắn gọn, ngữ pháp chính xác và rõ ràng. Tránh câu dài, lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'at grade 10' → 'in 10th grade'; 'I spend almost my time in study' → 'I spend most of my time studying'). Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về môn học hoặc lịch học nếu cần, dùng liên từ hợp lý. Giữ 1–4 câu.

示例: I'm a 10th-grade student at a local high school. I spend most of my time studying, especially focusing on math and English, and I usually study both at school and at home.

建议: Cần câu trả lời có cấu trúc rõ ràng: mở đầu trả lời trực tiếp (tên trường), sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể vì sao nổi tiếng. Sửa ngữ pháp (e.g., 'have a lot of best teacher' → 'has many excellent teachers'). Tránh đoạn kết dang dở; dùng nối từ như 'because' hoặc 'since' để liên kết ý.

示例: I study at Lake Vernon High School, which is quite well-known in my area. Many students try to get in because the school has many excellent teachers and strong academic programs.

建议: Cần trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc, tránh lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp ('many student are best' → 'many students excel'; 'almost good teachers' → 'many good teachers'; 'ambideous' không đúng — có thể 'ambitious' hoặc 'supportive'). Nên bổ sung lý do cụ thể (tài nguyên, môi trường học tập) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

示例: Yes, it's a great place to study because many students excel in various subjects and the teachers are very supportive. The school also provides good facilities and a motivating atmosphere for learning.

建议: Cần diễn đạt ý muốn thay đổi rõ ràng và chính xác: dùng thì đúng (e.g., 'I would like the school to improve the toilets'); sửa ngữ pháp ('WC rooms' → 'restrooms' or 'toilets'; 'don't have their responsible' → 'aren't responsible'/'don't take responsibility'). Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về đề xuất và giải pháp, dùng liên từ để rõ ràng.

示例: Yes, I would like the school to improve the restrooms because they are often dirty and poorly maintained. I think adding more cleaning staff and encouraging students to take responsibility would help keep them cleaner.

建议: Câu trả lời hiện tại không rõ nghĩa và nhiều lỗi (ví dụ 'college grill' không hợp lý; có lẽ muốn nói 'college student' or 'go to college'/'study at an economics university'). Cần nêu mục tiêu rõ ràng, lý do cụ thể và kế hoạch tiếp theo (ví dụ chọn ngành, dự định học tiếp). Sử dụng cấu trúc đơn giản, tránh lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp, tối đa 3–4 câu.

示例: In the future, I want to study economics at a university in my country. I hope to specialize in finance because I'm interested in how markets work, and I plan to prepare by studying hard and joining related clubs at school.

× I'm a student at grade 10 in a high school in my country and I spend almost my time in study and do a lot of lesson at school and at home.

✓ I'm a tenth-grade student at a high school in my country, and I spend most of my time studying and doing a lot of lessons at school and at home.

The sentence has multiple structure problems: word order and word choice. 'at grade 10' should be 'a tenth-grade student' (correct modifier order and noun form). 'spend almost my time in study' is incorrect; use 'spend most of my time studying' (correct quantifier and verb + -ing). 'do a lot of lesson' should be 'doing a lot of lessons' (plural noun and -ing form). Combine clauses with a comma and conjunction for fluency.

× I study in a popular high school in my country, namely Lake Vernon High School where many people want to study in this because this have a lot of best teacher and.

✓ I study at a popular high school in my country, namely Lake Vernon High School, where many people want to study because it has many excellent teachers.

Use 'study at' for institutions, not 'study in'. Remove redundant 'in this'. 'This have' is incorrect subject; use 'it has'. 'a lot of best teacher' is incorrect; use 'many excellent teachers' (adjective choice and plural). Also add commas to separate the appositive and the relative clause.

× Yes, it is a good place to study in my country because at this school we have many student are best in almost subjects and we have almost good teachers and create a ambideous atmosphere for.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to study because at this school we have many students who are good at most subjects, and we have many good teachers who create an ambitious atmosphere.

'many student are' violates subject-verb agreement and plural form; use 'many students who are'. 'almost subjects' should be 'most subjects'. 'we have almost good teachers' is incorrect quantifier; use 'many good teachers'. 'create a ambideous atmosphere for' is ungrammatical; use 'who create an ambitious atmosphere.' Adjust relative clauses for clarity.

× Yes, I went to the school where I study make a change in facilities in WC rooms because at this time the display is so messy and dirty. Also the student don't have their responsible to clean this.

✓ Yes, I would like the school where I study to make changes to the restroom facilities because currently the toilets are messy and dirty. Also, the students don't take responsibility for cleaning them.

Original mixes past and present incorrectly: 'I went to the school where I study make a change' is ungrammatical. Use modal 'would like' for desired changes. 'WC rooms' -> 'restroom facilities' or 'toilets'. 'the display is so messy' should be 'the toilets are messy'. 'student don't have their responsible' -> 'students don't take responsibility' (plural and correct verb phrase). Use present tense and appropriate modals.

× In my future, I want to become a college grill at a economic university is my country because it's so pure and it's a dream for me to create a ambitious atmosphere and.

✓ In the future, I want to attend an economics university in my country because it is prestigious, and it is my dream to contribute to an ambitious academic atmosphere.

The original contains many incorrect words and structure: 'become a college grill' is meaningless; likely intended 'attend a college' or 'study at an economics university'. 'a economic university' should be 'an economics university' (article and noun form). 'it's so pure' is inappropriate—use 'prestigious' or 'well-regarded'. 'create a ambitious atmosphere' -> 'contribute to an ambitious academic atmosphere'. Remove trailing 'and' and correct overall sentence structure.