学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and minor grammar mistakes (e.g., 'it's very according' is incorrect). Use a linking word to add a brief reason. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I'm a student at New Sun High School in Taiwan, currently in Grade 12. I'm focusing on school subjects and preparing for the national exams, so it's quite tiring but necessary.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and correct word choice. Replace unclear phrases ('cannot be good as', 'teachers eat really useful') with accurate vocabulary. Use a linking word to contrast advantages and disadvantages and provide one specific detail.

示例: I study in a rural, mountainous area, so facilities aren't as good as in the city. However, the learning environment is motivating and the teachers are very helpful and experienced.

建议: Start with a direct answer, fix grammar (subject-verb agreement), remove repetition, and give a specific example of equipment or clubs. Use a linking word to add supporting detail.

示例: Yes, I think it's a good place to study because it provides adequate equipment such as computers and science labs. In addition, there are many clubs like the debate club and sports teams that students can join in their free time.

建议: Answer directly and correct errors ('a lost playground' unclear). Be specific about the changes you want and why, and use linking words to explain the benefit of each change.

示例: Yes. I would like the school to offer more elective courses and install modern equipment such as updated lab tools and computers. Also, a larger playground would improve our PE lessons and encourage more outdoor activities.

建议: Give a clear, concise statement of your plans, avoid repetition, and add a brief reason or next step (which degree or certification). Use a linking word to show purpose.

示例: After high school I plan to attend university to study English education because I want to become an English teacher. Therefore, I will complete a teaching degree and obtain the necessary teaching certificate.

× Well, I'm currently studying at New Sun High School in Taiwan.

✓ Well, I'm currently studying at New Sun High School in Taiwan.

No change needed. Sentence correctly uses present continuous to describe ongoing action.

× I'm in grade 12 and my main focus is on my school subject and preparing for the National School exams.

✓ I'm in grade 12, and my main focus is on my school subjects and preparing for the national exams.

Original had singular 'subject' but context implies multiple subjects, which is a singular/plural issue and word choice. Also 'National School exams' is awkward; use 'national exams'. Add a comma before 'and' to join clauses. Suggestion: use plural 'subjects' and 'national exams' for natural phrasing.

× Although it's a bit tiring but I feel it's very according.

✓ Although it's a bit tiring, I feel it's very rewarding.

The conjunctions 'Although' and 'but' should not be used together; this is a sentence structure and incorrect conjunction issue. 'Very according' is not correct English; likely meant 'very rewarding' or 'very worthwhile'. Use either 'Although' at start with a comma or 'But' without 'Although'. Replace 'according' with an appropriate adjective.

× I study in a rural area, also a mountainous place, so it cannot be good as in the city, but the environment is very motivated and the teachers eat really useful.

✓ I study in a rural, mountainous area, so it is not as good as the city in some ways, but the environment is very motivating and the teachers are really helpful.

Several errors: 'cannot be good as in the city' should be 'is not as good as the city' — incorrect modal/negation and preposition use. 'The environment is very motivated' misuses 'motivated' (environments are motivating). 'The teachers eat really useful' has word choice and verb errors: 'eat' is wrong verb and 'useful' modifies objects, not people; use 'are really helpful'. Corrections address prepositions, word choice, and subject-verb agreement.

× I think it's a good place because it also provide enough equipment for student to study there and also have also has many clubs for students to take part in in in free time.

✓ I think it's a good place because it also provides enough equipment for students to study there, and it has many clubs for students to take part in during their free time.

Errors include verb agreement: 'provide' should be 'provides' to match singular subject 'it' — third person singular issue (subject-verb agreement). 'Student' should be plural 'students' (singular/plural issue). Redundant words 'also have also has' and repeated 'in' should be removed. Use 'during their free time' for natural preposition and pronoun use.

× I would like my school to provide more classes and and modern equipment there for student to study and a lost playground for for us to study PE.

✓ I would like my school to provide more classes and modern equipment for students to study, and a larger playground for us to do PE.

Multiple errors: duplicate words 'and and' and 'for for'. 'Student' should be plural 'students' (singular/plural issue). 'A lost playground' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'a larger playground'. 'Study PE' is unnatural — use 'do PE' or 'have PE'. Also remove redundant 'there'.

× After high school I plan to go to the university and continue my my my study.

✓ After high school, I plan to go to university and continue my studies.

Repeated words 'my my my' should be single. Use 'go to university' (omit 'the' unless referring to a specific institution) and plural 'studies' is more natural for ongoing education. Added comma after introductory phrase for clarity.

× I want to become an become an English teacher, so I must have a certificate.

✓ I want to become an English teacher, so I must get a teaching certificate.

Original has duplicated 'an become an' — remove the extra words. 'Have a certificate' is understandable but 'get a teaching certificate' is more natural. Keep article 'an' before 'English teacher' is correct; ensure duplicates removed.