学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Nên trả lời rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn, dùng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn rồi thêm thông tin hỗ trợ (tên trường và vị trí). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ và phát âm gây hiểu nhầm (ví dụ: tên riêng nên phát âm rõ). Ví dụ cải thiện: 1) Câu chủ đề: xác nhận bạn là học sinh; 2) Thông tin hỗ trợ: tên trường và vị trí; 3) Giữ tối đa 2–3 câu.

示例: I'm a high school student. I attend Jiu Guangfu High School, which is in Hungian, near my hometown.

建议: Câu trả lời nên trực tiếp và mạch lạc: bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rồi nêu thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: quận/huyện, khoảng cách từ nhà). Tránh lặp lại thông tin đã nói và sửa lỗi giới từ/đặt tên ("the school's name is...").

示例: I study at Jiu Guangfu High School, which is just outside my hometown. It's only about a ten-minute walk from my house.

建议: Cần trả lời rõ ràng có/không và giải thích vì sao bằng 1–2 câu hỗ trợ. Tránh hesitations và ngắt quãng ('well', 'actually' lặp). Nếu không chắc chắn, có thể nói điều bạn biết và thừa nhận điểm yếu. Hãy dùng từ vựng đơn giản mà chính xác.

示例: Yes, it's a good place to study because the teachers are supportive and the classrooms are well-equipped. However, some facilities could be improved.

建议: Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No) rồi nêu 1–2 thay đổi cụ thể kèm lý do. Tránh cấu trúc sai (ví dụ 'although... but' là thừa) và nói cụ thể về 'devices' — tên thiết bị, lý do cần sửa/thay. Dùng liên từ để nối ý.

示例: Yes, I would like some changes. For example, the computer labs need newer computers because the old ones are slow, and the science rooms need better equipment for experiments.

建议: Cần trả lời trực tiếp về kế hoạch tương lai với cấu trúc rõ ràng: mục tiêu, điểm đến, lý do và hoạt động bạn đang làm để chuẩn bị. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp ("go to French" sai; nên là 'study in France'/'go to France'), hoàn thành câu và dùng từ vựng chính xác (e.g., 'attracted to the culture, architecture and climate'). Giữ 2–3 câu rõ ràng.

示例: After high school, I plan to study abroad in France. I'm interested in French culture and climate, so I'm preparing by watching videos about life there and improving my French language skills.

× Now I'm a student in high school named Jiu Kuang Fu located in Hungian.

✓ Now I'm a student at a high school called Jiu Kuang Fu located in Hungian.

The original uses 'in high school' and 'named' awkwardly. Use the article 'a' before 'high school' and the preposition 'at' is more natural for attending a school. Use 'called' to introduce the school's name. Suggestion: 'a high school' -> include indefinite article; use 'at' for place of study and 'called' for names.

× I study at school near my hometown, name is Jiu Guangfu.

✓ I study at a school near my hometown; its name is Jiu Guangfu.

Missing article before 'school' and incorrect clause 'name is'. Use 'a school' and connect with a clause 'its name is'. Use a semicolon or separate sentences. Suggestion: include appropriate articles and possessive 'its'.

× Well, actually, because my school is my school where some, no, I don't know that.

✓ Well, actually, I don't really know how to answer that about my school.

Original is fragmented and ungrammatical; contains redundant repetition and an incomplete subordinate clause. Rephrase to a clear sentence expressing uncertainty. Suggestion: avoid repeating subjects and complete the thought.

× Well, actually although my schools is very good, but I think there are many things that can be changed.

✓ Well, actually, although my school is very good, I think there are many things that can be changed.

Use singular 'school' not 'schools' because referring to one school; remove the redundant conjunction 'but' when using 'although'. Also correct subject-verb agreement 'schools is' -> 'school is'. Suggestion: choose one subordinating conjunction (although) and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× For examples there are some devices of several rooms in school.

✓ For example, there are some devices in several rooms in the school.

Use singular 'For example' and correct word order: 'devices in several rooms'. Add the definite article 'the' before 'school' or use 'my school'. Suggestion: 'For example, there are some devices in several rooms at my school.'

× To be honest, I'm a person with good academic performance, so I will pursue an academic path abroad after I graduate from high school.

✓ To be honest, I have good academic performance, so I will pursue an academic path abroad after I graduate from high school.

'I'm a person with good academic performance' is wordy and slightly awkward. Use present simple 'I have good academic performance' to describe a current state. Tense of future action 'will pursue' is correct. Suggestion: prefer concise expressions for ability or performance.

× I have been meaning to go to French as an international student and I watch some videos about French on YouTube.

✓ I have been meaning to go to France as an international student, and I watch some videos about France on YouTube.

Use the country name 'France' with preposition 'to' (go to France), not 'French' which is an adjective/language. Also 'about France' rather than 'about French'. Suggestion: use correct noun for destination (France) and 'about France' when referring to the country.

× I've been attracted to the FM towers, the climate, and the.

✓ I've been attracted to the famous towers, the climate, and the culture.

Original sentence is incomplete and 'FM towers' is unclear (likely intended 'famous towers'). Complete the list with a parallel noun and finish the sentence. Suggestion: ensure parallel structure in lists and finish the final item.