学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence stating you are a student, then give one or two specific details (where you study and your immediate plan). Avoid repetition and incorrect school names. Use correct tense and simpler sentences if unsure of complex forms.

示例: I am a student preparing for the college entrance examination at Crom School. I hope to enter university next year and then find a job related to my studies.

建议: Start with a clear statement of the school name and its type. Provide one or two specific reasons why it is good, using appropriate vocabulary (e.g., experienced, helpful, knowledgeable). Avoid incorrect words ("crime" or "taste") and reduce filler words.

示例: I study at a cram school called Kawaijuku. It is a good place to study because many teachers are experienced and helpful, and they explain difficult topics clearly.

建议: Give a direct answer then balance positive and negative points. Use linking words (however, but) and precise adjectives. Avoid repetition and awkward similes; describe discomfort succinctly.

示例: Yes, it is a good place to study because of the strong teaching staff. However, the classrooms are very cold, which makes me uncomfortable during long lessons.

建议: Answer directly and give specific, actionable suggestions. Use correct comparative forms (warmer, more spacious) and linking words to explain reasons. Keep sentences clear and limit to 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes. I would like the classrooms to be warmer and more spacious. Also, I think the school should provide more self-study rooms because it is hard to find a seat after class.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence about your plans. If unsure about long-term plans, be honest but give a specific short-term goal. Use correct verbs (major in/study, graduate, get a job) and prepositions (related to).

示例: I plan to study physics at university because I enjoy the subject. After I graduate, I would like to find a job related to physics, such as research or engineering.

× I am a student preparing for college entrance examination at Crom school.

✓ I am a student preparing for the college entrance examination at Crom School.

The sentence needed the definite article 'the' before 'college entrance examination' because it refers to a specific exam; 'Crom School' should be capitalized as a proper noun. Use of present continuous 'am preparing' is correct for an ongoing action.

× I don't go to university right now but I wish I can go to crumb school next year.

✓ I am not attending university right now, but I hope I can go to Crom School next year.

Use 'am not attending' or 'don't attend' to describe current status; 'wish I can' is incorrect: use 'hope I can' for future possibility. 'crumb school' appears to be a typo for 'Crom School' and proper nouns must be capitalized.

× Then I got the job, I get a job in the future.

✓ I hope to get a job in the future.

'Then I got the job' mixes past tense with future intent and is unclear. Use 'hope to get' to express future desire. Keep tense consistent and concise.

× I study at crime school called Kawaijuku.

✓ I study at a cram school called Kawaijuku.

'crime school' is likely a misspelling of 'cram school' (a private tutoring school). Add the article 'a' before 'cram school' because it is a singular countable noun.

× The the place is so good because so many teachers are so experienced and helpful.

✓ The place is very good because many teachers are experienced and helpful.

Remove the duplicate 'the'. Use 'very' instead of repetitive 'so' and avoid double 'so many' with 'so experienced' — 'many teachers are experienced' is clearer. 'So' can be used for emphasis but avoid multiple instances that sound informal.

× Like they taste so well to me and yeah they got knowledge to tell teach.

✓ They teach me well, and they have a lot of knowledge to share.

'They taste so well to me' is incorrect collocation; 'teach me well' expresses the intended meaning. 'they got knowledge to tell teach' is ungrammatical — use 'they have a lot of knowledge to share'.

× Yes, it's a good place to study for me.

✓ Yes, it's a good place for me to study.

Word order: 'for me to study' is the natural English structure. Present tense 'it's' is appropriate.

× As I said before, there are so many good teachers there.

✓ As I said before, there are many good teachers there.

'So many' is informal but not ungrammatical; changing to 'many' makes the tone more neutral and fits spoken response. The original is acceptable, but revise for clarity.

× But the classroom is so freezing.

✓ But the classroom is freezing.

Use 'freezing' alone; adding 'so' is informal and redundant. 'Freezing' accurately describes very cold temperature.

× Like it's like just I'm in the freezer.

✓ It feels like I'm in a freezer.

Avoid repeated 'like' and incorrect word order. 'It feels like I'm in a freezer' is a natural expression comparing the classroom to a freezer.

× This one point I uncomfortable.

✓ This is one point that makes me uncomfortable.

The original lacks a verb and proper structure. Add 'is' and 'makes me' to create a complete sentence and convey cause of discomfort.

× Yes, as I said before I want to make the classroom more warmer and I want to make more room.

✓ Yes, as I said before, I want to make the classroom warmer and create more space.

Do not use 'more warmer' (double comparative); use 'warmer'. 'Make more room' is acceptable but 'create more space' is clearer. Add a comma after the introductory clause.

× I want to have more classroom for self studying because after the class I want to study more but I cannot find the seat.

✓ I want to have more classrooms for self-study because after class I want to study more but I cannot find a seat.

Use plural 'classrooms' when meaning multiple rooms. 'Self studying' should be 'self-study' (noun) or 'study by myself'. 'After class' is the usual phrase without 'the' and 'a seat' is correct for a single spot.

× I don't have study plans for the future but I adapter at physics so I want to study physics at the college and after graduate from the college I want to get the job relating to physics.

✓ I don't have definite study plans yet, but I am interested in physics, so I want to study physics in college and, after graduating, get a job related to physics.

'I adapter at physics' is incorrect — use 'I am interested in physics'. 'Study physics at the college' should be 'study physics in college'. Use gerund 'graduating' after 'after' and 'a job related to physics' is the correct phrasing. Ensure consistent tense and natural collocations.