学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và ngắn gọn hơn. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'a University city student' không tự nhiên) và dùng một câu chủ đề ngắn, rồi thêm 1-2 câu bổ trợ. Nên sửa cấu trúc về tương lai ('I would like to become a tour guide') và loại bỏ lặp từ. Thêm liên từ hợp lý nếu cần.

示例: I'm a student at the University of Foreign Languages, where I study English. In the future, I would like to become a tour guide because I enjoy introducing people to different places and cultures.

建议: Cần cấu trúc rõ ràng: một câu chủ đề nêu nơi học, sau đó nêu lí do cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ ('this this') và lỗi ngữ pháp (subject-verb agreement: 'school usually have' → 'school usually has'). Câu ví dụ thiếu phần kết luận; hoàn tất ý 'become more' bằng cụm từ cụ thể. Dùng nối từ như 'for example' hợp lí và ngắn gọn.

示例: I study at the University of Foreign Languages, where I major in English. I like it because the atmosphere is stimulating and the lecturers are supportive. For example, the university regularly holds seminars that help me improve my speaking skills and build confidence.

建议: Trả lời quá lặp và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, phát âm bị thể hiện trong chữ viết ('I I'm very, I'm very'). Cần một câu chủ đề đơn giản trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó nêu 1-2 lý do cụ thể với cấu trúc đúng. Sửa các lỗi như 'can rent into this study' (không rõ nghĩa) và dùng danh từ số nhiều/ít đúng ('atmosphere' không cần chia).

示例: Yes, it's a great place to study. The campus has a lively, positive atmosphere and the lecturers are knowledgeable and supportive, which helps students learn effectively.

建议: Ý rõ ràng nhưng có một số lặp từ ('in the weather') và thì/động từ không khớp ('make the classroom become' → 'make classrooms more comfortable' ; 'makes' → 'help'). Câu nên ngắn gọn, dùng một câu chủ đề nêu thay đổi và 1 câu giải thích hậu quả cụ thể.

示例: Yes. I hope the university would install air conditioning in the classrooms because it gets extremely hot. That would make the rooms more comfortable and help students concentrate better.

建议: Ý hay nhưng câu dài, lộn xộn và nhiều lỗi (lặp từ 'to traditional to local traditions', không rõ 'environmental English environment', câu kết không hoàn chỉnh). Hãy tách thành 2-3 câu: mục tiêu nghề nghiệp, lí do, và một kế hoạch học tập cụ thể. Dùng từ vựng chính xác như 'local traditions' và 'an English-speaking environment'.

示例: In the future I would like to become a tour guide because I enjoy showing people different places and introducing them to local traditions. I also hope to work in an English-speaking environment to improve my language skills and become a more competent professional.

× my school usually have seminars that which help me improve my speaking skill and become more.

✓ my school usually has seminars which help me improve my speaking skills and become more confident.

The subject 'my school' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' (singular). 'Which' should be used without 'that' together. 'Speaking skill' should be plural as 'speaking skills' to refer to ability in general. Added 'confident' to complete the idea. Suggestion: match singular subjects with singular verbs and use plural nouns when speaking about general abilities.

× the lecturers are very supportive. For example, my school usually have seminars that which help me improve my speaking skill and become more.

✓ the lecturers are very supportive. For example, my school usually has seminars which help me improve my speaking skills and become more confident.

Third person singular subject 'my school' requires the verb 'has' not 'have'. Also remove the redundant 'that' before 'which'. Use plural 'speaking skills'. Suggestion: for he/she/it subjects use verbs with -s in present simple.

× I study at the University of Foreign Languages where I major in English and I really love this this university because the atmosphere is very stimulating, the lecturers are very supportive.

✓ I study at the University of Foreign Languages, where I major in English. I really love this university because the atmosphere is very stimulating and the lecturers are very supportive.

The original sentence is run-on and repeats 'this'. Breaking into two sentences and removing repetition clarifies meaning. Use 'and' to connect two related qualities rather than a comma splice. Suggestion: avoid run-on sentences by using punctuation and conjunctions correctly.

× Yes, of course, I I'm very, I'm very happy and my parents are very proud of me because I can rent into this study.

✓ Yes, of course. I'm very happy and my parents are very proud of me because I was able to get into this university.

The phrase 'can rent into this study' is incorrect and likely intended to mean 'was able to get into this university' which requires past tense 'was able' because the admission happened in the past. Suggestion: use appropriate past tense verbs to describe completed events.

× The main reason is that the school had has the atmosphere, had the good atmosphere, active atmospheres and the lecturers are very knowledgeable and supportive and my friends all friend.

✓ The main reason is that the school has a good, active atmosphere; the lecturers are very knowledgeable and supportive, and I get along well with my friends.

'Had has' is incorrect duplication; present simple 'has' fits. 'Atmospheres' should be singular 'atmosphere' with adjectives ordered correctly ('good, active'). 'My friends all friend' is ungrammatical; rephrased to 'I get along well with my friends.' Suggestion: use present simple for general states and correct adjective order and idiomatic expressions.

× I hope my university would install some air conditioning because the weather is extremely hot in the weather and that would make the classroom become more comfortable and makes students focus better on their studies.

✓ I hope my university will install some air conditioning because the weather is extremely hot, and that would make the classrooms more comfortable and help students focus better on their studies.

Use 'will' or 'would' consistently; 'hope' typically takes 'will' for future intentions. Remove redundant phrase 'in the weather'. 'Make the classroom become more comfortable' is wordy; 'make the classrooms more comfortable' is natural. Use 'help students focus' instead of 'makes students focus'. Suggestion: after 'hope' use 'will' for future actions and keep verb forms parallel.

× In the future I would like to become a tour guide because I enjoy showing people different places and introducing them to traditional to local traditions and also I want to work in environmental English environment so I can improve my English proficiency and become a competent growing but.

✓ In the future I would like to become a tour guide because I enjoy showing people different places and introducing them to local traditions. I also want to work in an English-speaking environment so I can improve my English proficiency and become a competent guide.

Removed duplicated 'to' and corrected 'traditional to local traditions' to 'local traditions'. 'Environmental English environment' is incorrect; 'English-speaking environment' conveys the meaning. 'Competent growing but' is ungrammatical; changed to 'competent guide'. Use parallel sentence structure and correct noun phrases. Suggestion: simplify and use common collocations like 'English-speaking environment' and 'competent guide'.