学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct minor grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and provide one specific supporting detail. Correct articles and word order (e.g., "a good place for students to focus on their studies").

示例: I’m a student at Fuzhou University in Fujian province. It’s a good place for students to focus on their studies because the campus is quiet and the libraries are well stocked, which helps me concentrate.

建议: Use correct grammar and clearer, specific details. Begin with a direct statement about the location, then give one or two concrete reasons why it’s special (memories, places visited). Avoid vague or incorrect phrases like "in there" and "in our appearance."

示例: I study in Fuzhou, a coastal city in Fujian province known for its parks and rivers. It’s special to me because I made many close friends here and we often visit West Lake Park and local tea houses together.

建议: Correct grammar and improve cohesion. Give one specific reason with linking words (e.g., "because", "and"). Use plural/singular correctly and more precise vocabulary ("professors", "a variety of classes").

示例: Yes, it’s a great place to study because there are many professional professors and a variety of course options, so students can gain both theoretical knowledge and practical experience.

建议: Answer the actual question directly about changes you'd like, not your major. State one specific change and explain why. Use correct sentence structure and linking words (e.g., "I would like... because...").

示例: I would like the university to improve outdoor study spaces by adding more shaded seating and Wi‑Fi in parks, because that would make it easier for students to study outside comfortably.

建议: Give a concise topic sentence and one or two specific goals for studying abroad. Use correct grammar ("different design approaches and cultural perspectives") and add linking words to explain benefits.

示例: I plan to study abroad to learn different design approaches and gain international experience. This will help me understand diverse cultural perspectives and improve my landscape architecture skills.

× Actually, I'm a student and I study in Fuzhou University located in Fujian province.

✓ Actually, I'm a student and I study at Fuzhou University in Fujian province.

Use 'study at' with institutions (preposition error -> sentence structure). Also 'located in' is unnecessary; 'in Fujian province' is sufficient. Suggestion: use 'study at [university] in [province]'.

× I think my university is a good place to for students to focus on their study.

✓ I think my university is a good place for students to focus on their studies.

Remove the extra 'to' and use the plural 'studies' for general activities (sentence structure and singular/plural). Suggestion: 'a good place for students to focus on their studies.'

× I study in Fuzhou, which is one of the most beautiful city in China.

✓ I study in Fuzhou, which is one of the most beautiful cities in China.

When using 'one of the' the noun must be plural ('cities') and 'the' is correct before superlatives. Suggestion: use plural after 'one of the'.

× I think Fuzhou is a crucial city to me because I have a lot of happiest memories and a lot of friends in there.

✓ I think Fuzhou is an important city to me because I have many happy memories and many friends there.

Replace 'crucial' with 'important' for personal context; use 'an' before vowel sound (article). 'a lot of happiest' is ungrammatical—use 'many happy memories'. 'in there' is incorrect; use 'there'. Suggestion: use 'many' with plural nouns and place adverbs correctly.

× We have done many things together in our appearance.

✓ We have done many things together in public places.

The phrase 'in our appearance' is unclear and incorrect. Likely meaning is 'in public' or 'in the city' or 'together in public places'. Suggestion: choose a clear phrase like 'in public places' or 'around the city'.

× Yes, absolutely it is a good place for students to focus their study and there are a lot of professional professor to teach you.

✓ Yes, absolutely. It is a good place for students to focus on their studies, and there are many professional professors to teach you.

Add punctuation for clarity. Use 'focus on their studies' (preposition and plural). 'a lot of' can be 'many' and 'professor' should be plural 'professors'. Suggestion: use plural nouns and correct prepositions.

× Besides there have a lot of various classes to choice you can have a good experience.

✓ Besides, there are many different classes to choose from so you can have a good experience.

Use 'there are' (there be issue and sentence structure), 'many different classes' (quantifier and adjective choice), 'to choose from' (correct verb phrase), and add 'so' for result. Suggestion: use 'there are' + plural noun and 'choose from'.

× Where I major in landscape architecture so I can design a lot of public space to my city.

✓ I major in landscape architecture, so I can design many public spaces in my city.

Begin sentence with subject 'I'. Use 'major in' correctly. Use 'many public spaces' (plural) and 'in my city' (preposition). Remove 'Where' which is incorrect here. Suggestion: write 'I major in... so I can...'.

× Such as I can design A shaded sitting area to my city to make the park usable.

✓ For example, I can design a shaded seating area in my city to make the park more usable.

Start with 'For example' instead of 'Such as' for sentence start. Use lowercase 'a'. 'sitting area' -> 'seating area'. Use 'in my city' not 'to my city'. Add 'more' to 'usable' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: 'For example, I can design a shaded seating area in my city to make the park more usable.'

× Actually, I plan to study abroad which can expose me to different design approaches and cultural perspective.

✓ Actually, I plan to study abroad, which will expose me to different design approaches and cultural perspectives.

Use future/modal 'will' for the expected effect. 'perspective' should be plural 'perspectives' to match 'different'. Suggestion: use 'will' and plural nouns for multiple items.

× I can study a lot of different things and culture.

✓ I can study a lot of different subjects and cultures.

Use 'subjects' for academic topics and plural 'cultures'. 'a lot of different things and culture' is vague; be specific. Suggestion: use 'subjects' and pluralize 'cultures'.