学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use correct noun/verb agreement. Add one specific detail about your course or why you like it. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: I'm currently a student at Fuzhou University, where I study landscape architecture. I chose this major because I enjoy designing public parks and green spaces. For example, last semester I worked on a park redesign project that focused on native plants and community use.

建议: Answer directly, avoid awkward phrasing and repetition. Use one clear sentence about the university location and one supporting reason with a linking word (because/so). Be specific about what you like about the city.

示例: I study at Fuzhou University in Fujian province. I like living there because the city has many parks and a relaxed pace, so it's a pleasant place for students to focus on their studies.

建议: Use grammatical sentences and avoid repeating the word "beautiful." Provide one or two specific reasons that make it good for study, and link ideas with 'because' or 'and'. Keep it concise.

示例: Yes, I think it's a great place to study because the city has many well-maintained parks and quiet study spots. Also, living there is convenient for me since I can be close to my girlfriend and our dogs, which helps me feel settled.

建议: Clarify your idea and correct tense/word choice. State a specific change you would make, explain why, and link your role as a landscape architecture student to the change. Use 'because' or 'so' for coherence.

示例: Yes. As a landscape architecture student, I would improve park layouts to increase green space and walking paths because this would encourage more outdoor activities and improve air quality. For example, I would add native plants and shaded seating areas to make parks more usable year-round.

建议: Use correct verb forms and be specific about where and what you plan to study. Explain how studying abroad will benefit your career with one concrete example. Limit to 2–3 clear sentences.

示例: I plan to study abroad to improve my professional and communication skills, ideally at a university known for landscape design. Studying in another country will expose me to different design approaches and cultural perspectives, which I can apply to projects back home.

× Actually I'm a student now, I study in Fuzhou University located in Fujian province and I major in landscape architecture which is my favorite things I want to do.

✓ Actually I'm a student now. I study at Fuzhou University in Fujian Province and I major in landscape architecture, which is my favorite thing to do.

Pronoun and noun agreement and sentence structure: 'things' is plural but refers to a singular idea, so use 'thing'. Also use 'at' for studying at a university and capitalize 'Province'. The original is a run-on; split into two sentences and add a comma before the relative clause for clarity. Suggestions: use 'at' with institutions, ensure noun/pronoun number matches, and avoid run-on sentences by using periods or conjunctions.

× I study in Fuzhou University located in Fujian province, which is my favorite place I want to live in. I think Fuzhou is a good city I can find.

✓ I study at Fuzhou University in Fujian Province, which is my favorite place to live. I think Fuzhou is a good city to live in.

Awkward and redundant phrasing: use 'at' for institutions and simplify 'favorite place I want to live in' to 'favorite place to live'. The second sentence uses an incorrect relative phrase 'I can find'; use 'to live in' to express suitability. Suggestions: simplify and avoid redundant words, use proper prepositions with verbs like 'live'.

× Yes, I think Fuzhou is a beautiful city and there are a lot of beautiful parks and have beautiful Skylands. Besides I can live in with my girlfriend and my dogs there.

✓ Yes, I think Fuzhou is a beautiful city with many lovely parks and green spaces. Also, I can live there with my girlfriend and my dogs.

Tense and verb usage: 'there are a lot of... and have' is ungrammatical because subjects and verbs are mismatched. Replace with 'a city with many...'. 'Skylands' is unclear; 'green spaces' or 'landscapes' is more natural. Also correct word order: 'live there with' not 'live in with'. Suggestions: match subjects and verbs, use natural collocations (a city with...), and place adverbials correctly.

× Yes, I'd like to make any changes in my city because I major in landscape architecture, I can enhance space, environment and parks surroundings immediately and I like to build beautiful city.

✓ Yes, I'd like to make some changes in my city. Because I major in landscape architecture, I can improve public spaces, the environment, and park surroundings, and I would like to help make the city more beautiful.

Run-on sentence and word choice: 'make any changes' is odd in affirmative context — use 'some changes'. The comma splice joins independent clauses; split into sentences. 'Enhance space, environment and parks surroundings immediately' is awkward — use 'improve public spaces, the environment, and park surroundings' and avoid 'immediately' unless appropriate. Also use 'help make the city more beautiful'. Suggestions: avoid comma splices, choose natural collocations (public spaces), and use articles where needed.

× Well, I'd like to study go abroad because I want to enhance my personal skills and communication skills. When I go to other country, I can learn a lot of different cultural and and knowledge.

✓ Well, I'd like to study abroad because I want to improve my personal and communication skills. When I go to another country, I can learn about different cultures and gain knowledge.

Incorrect verb phrase and article use: 'study go abroad' is ungrammatical; use 'study abroad'. 'Enhance' is possible but 'improve' is more natural for skills. 'When I go to other country' needs an article: 'another country'. 'a lot of different cultural and and knowledge' is incorrect and duplicated; use 'different cultures and gain knowledge' or 'cultural knowledge'. Suggestions: use correct verb phrases ('study abroad'), include articles with countable nouns ('another country'), avoid repeated words, and use parallel nouns ('cultures and knowledge').