学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “I’m a student”), then give relevant details in two short supporting sentences. Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Replace vague phrases with precise information (e.g., ‘I completed a master’s in Physics and I’m now studying for another master’s in Project Management in the UK’).

示例: I’m a student. I completed a master’s degree in Physics, and I’m now studying for a second master’s in Project Management at a university in the UK.

建议: Give a clear location and one or two specific positive details. Avoid hesitations and personal pronoun errors. Use linking words if adding support (e.g., ‘because’ or ‘and’) and keep sentences short. For example: name the university clearly and mention specific strengths like ‘strong labs’ or ‘supportive teachers’.

示例: I study at the University of Park. It has well-equipped labs and supportive teachers, so students get a high quality of education.

建议: Answer directly and give one clear reason with a brief example. Avoid vague or repetitive phrases. Use correct grammar (e.g., ‘students who want to graduate’) and a linking word to connect reason and example (e.g., ‘because’ or ‘for example’).

示例: Yes, it’s a good place to study because the faculty provide strong academic support. For example, tutors run regular review sessions that help students prepare for exams.

建议: State one or two concrete changes and explain briefly why they matter. Use linking words (‘because’, ‘so’) and correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘counseling services’ instead of ‘consultation’). Keep it to two sentences maximum.

示例: Yes. I would like the university to provide professional counseling services because many students experience high stress and need mental-health support.

建议: Give a clear, concise plan with one specific goal and a short reason. Avoid fillers and unclear phrases. For example, say what you will study, why, and what career you aim for, using two sentences and linking words like ‘so that’ or ‘in order to’.

示例: I plan to study Project Management with a focus on technical industries so that I can work as a technical project manager. I’m interested in combining technical knowledge with management skills to lead engineering teams.

× I have completed my masters program in physics.

✓ I have completed my master's program in physics.

The word 'masters' needs an apostrophe to form the possessive 'master's' when referring to the degree. Use 'master's program' to indicate the type of degree. Also ensure consistent capitalization for 'Physics' only if it's a proper noun (usually lowercase here). Suggestion: use 'master's program in physics.'

× Then I have chose to study.

✓ Then I chose to study.

The verb 'chose' is the simple past of 'choose' and should not be used with the present perfect auxiliary 'have'. Either use 'I chose' (simple past) or 'I have chosen' (present perfect). Given the sequence 'Then', simple past 'I chose' fits better. Suggestion: use 'I chose to study.'

× Furthermore, I have selected the I have selected a master's program in project Management from UK.

✓ Furthermore, I have selected a master's program in project management in the UK.

Remove the duplicated phrase and use 'project management' in lowercase. Use the article 'the' before 'UK' when referring to the country. The sentence should also use present perfect 'have selected' correctly once. Suggestion: 'I have selected a master's program in project management in the UK.'

× I haven't, uh, study, uh, on regular basis of from the University of Park, uh, where we have a good, uh, discussion about his labs and, uh, good, uh, teachers that, uh, which provide a great quality of education.

✓ I don't study on a regular basis at the University of Park, where we have good discussions about its labs and good teachers who provide a high quality of education.

Multiple issues: use 'do not study' for present simple negative instead of 'haven't study'. Use 'on a regular basis' with the article 'a'. Use the preposition 'at' for institutions. Replace 'his labs' with 'its labs' to refer to the university (incorrect pronoun). Use 'discussions' plural and 'who' to refer to teachers (relative pronoun). 'Provide a high quality of education' is more natural than 'provide a great quality of education.' Suggestions: simplify filler words and use correct present simple negative and pronouns.

× Yes, it is a good place to to study for the students who want to graduations and who wants to be graduated.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to study for students who want to graduate and who want to graduate.

The noun 'graduations' is incorrect; the verb 'graduate' should be used. Also ensure subject-verb agreement: use 'students who want' and 'who want to graduate.' Remove duplicate 'to' and unnecessary repetition. Suggestion: '...for students who want to graduate.'

× The liberties and teachers are provides a great opportunity for those through ordinance who wants to be in all all who wants to get graduated.

✓ The libraries and teachers provide great opportunities for those who want to graduate.

Many errors: 'liberties' should be 'libraries' (vocabulary), 'are provides' is wrong—use plural verb 'provide'. Remove unclear phrases 'through ordinance' and duplicate words. Use 'those who want' (not 'who wants') to match plural. Use 'graduate' as the verb. Suggestion: simplify to 'The libraries and teachers provide great opportunities for those who want to graduate.'

× Yes, I want to change, change, make some changes, because there is a lot of pressure on the students.

✓ Yes, I want to make some changes because there is a lot of pressure on students.

Remove repetition and the unnecessary article 'the' before 'students' when speaking generally. Keep verb 'want to make' for intention. Suggestion: 'I want to make some changes because there is a lot of pressure on students.'

× There is no consultation, consultant is provided to console and psychological orb for mental health of the student get pressurized and specialized.

✓ There is no consultation service or counselor provided for students' mental health, so students become pressured and need specialized support.

The original mixes nouns incorrectly: use 'consultation service' or 'counselor', not 'consultant is provided to console'. 'Psychological orb' is incorrect; use 'psychological support'. Use possessive 'students' mental health' and correct verb usage: 'students become pressured' and 'need specialized support.' Suggestion: rephrase clearly to state lack of counseling services and resulting pressure on students.

× I have, uh, study future plans, uh, to, uh, go down and, uh, study a project management that is related to a technical field, uh, which I like to most to study and to be a technical or Technical Support, uh, for mindset, uh, is good.

✓ My future study plan is to study project management related to a technical field, which I like most, and to become a technical support specialist.

Remove filler words and correct tense: use 'My future study plan is' (present simple for plans) or 'I plan to'. Use 'study project management' not 'study a project management'. Use 'related to a technical field' and 'which I like most'. Replace 'to be a technical or Technical Support' with 'to become a technical support specialist'. 'For mindset is good' is unclear and omitted. Suggestion: keep sentences concise and use standard noun phrases for job titles.