机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答基本切题，也提供了具体的年龄和篮球例子，但存在明显的语法、搭配和表达问题。首先应使用过去时，因为问题询问的是童年经历，例如“I had opportunities”而不是“I have opportunities”。其次，“this kind of opportunities”应改为“these opportunities”，“do try new things”应改为“try new things”，“stimulated me to do it”不自然，可改为“encouraged me to try it”。建议用清晰的主题句直接回答，再用“for example”补充具体经历，并减少“uh”和重复表达。

示例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, when I was seven, my teacher encouraged me to learn basketball, even though I had never played it before. At first, I found it difficult, but I gradually became more confident and really enjoyed it.

建议: 观点明确，也给出了篮球作为例子，但开头和后续句子有较多语法错误、重复和不自然搭配。应将“Of in my opinion”改为“In my opinion”，“can't not do one thing best”可改为“may not become really good at one particular activity”。“focus your focus your mind”重复，应改为“focus on it”，而“do the basketball better”应改为“play basketball better”。建议使用让步结构使答案更完整，例如“Although trying different things can be interesting, I think people should eventually focus on one or two activities”，并通过“because”和“for example”清楚连接理由和例子。

示例: In my opinion, people do not need to try as many things as possible. Although exploring different activities can be interesting, focusing on one or two of them helps people develop their skills more deeply. For example, if someone concentrates on basketball instead of constantly switching between different sports, they are more likely to become an excellent player.

× Yes, of course, I have this kind of opportunities.

✓ Yes, of course, I had opportunities of this kind.

“opportunities”是复数，不能与单数结构“this kind of”直接搭配。可以说“this kind of opportunity”，也可以说“opportunities of this kind”。这里使用复数表达更自然。

× Yes, of course, I have this kind of opportunities because, in China nowadays, teacher always encourages students to do try new things.

✓ Yes, of course, I had opportunities of this kind because, when I was a child, teachers always encouraged students to try new things.

问题描述的是“小时候”的经历，所以应该使用过去时：have改为had，encourages改为encouraged。注意，泛指“老师”时通常使用复数teachers。

× In China nowadays, teacher always encourages students to do try new things.

✓ In China nowadays, teachers always encourage students to try new things.

“teacher”表示一类人时应使用复数“teachers”。相应地，动词也要使用复数形式“encourage”。此外，“encourage somebody to do something”后面直接接动词原形，因此应说“to try”，不能说“to do try”。

× When I was seven years old, I didn't know how to play basketball, but my teacher stimulated me to do it.

✓ When I was seven years old, I didn't know how to play basketball, but my teacher encouraged me to try it.

这是对童年经历的描述，使用过去时“was”和“didn't know”是正确的。这里主要需要保持过去经历的表达一致；“encouraged”比“stimulated”更适合描述老师鼓励学生尝试活动。

× I don't think people should try lots of new things because if you do lots of new things, you can't not do one thing best.

✓ I don't think people should try lots of new things because if you do too many different things, you can't do any one thing well.

“can't not do”形成了不自然的双重否定结构。这里想表达“不能把任何一件事做好”，应使用“can't do any one thing well”。情态动词“can't”后面必须接动词原形“do”。

× You can't not do one thing best.

✓ You can't do any one thing well.

“best”通常是最高级，表示“最好地”，但此处只是表达“把某件事做好”，使用副词“well”更合适。由于前面有“any one thing”，使用“well”能够准确表达做事的质量。

× For example like if you play basketball then just focus your focus your mind on it instead of playing other sports then you will do the basketball better.

✓ For example, if you play basketball, just focus your mind on it instead of playing other sports, and you will play basketball better.

“For example”和“like”都可以表示举例，同时使用会造成重复，应保留“For example”。另外，一个条件句中不需要重复使用两个“then”；这里使用“and”连接结果会更自然。

× If you play basketball then just focus your focus your mind on it instead of playing other sports then you will do the basketball better.

✓ If you play basketball, just focus your mind on it instead of playing other sports, and you will play basketball better.

原句中“focus your focus your mind”重复了“focus”，造成句子结构错误。正确结构是“focus your mind on something”。同时，条件从句和主句之间应使用逗号分隔，使句子结构更加清楚。

× Then you will do the basketball better.

✓ Then you will play basketball better.

表示篮球这项运动时，通常说“play basketball”，不使用定冠词“the”。“the basketball”通常指某一个具体的篮球，而不是篮球运动本身。

× Then you will do the basketball better.

✓ Then you will play basketball better.

“better”在这里修饰动作“play”，作为副词使用是正确的；问题在于“do the basketball”不是自然的动词搭配。表示进行篮球运动应使用“play basketball”。建议记忆固定搭配“play + 球类运动”。