机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question more directly by naming one or two activities you tried as a child. Avoid the unnatural phrase “a very opportunist person”; say “an adventurous person” or “someone who liked trying new things.” Also, use “get involved in” rather than “involve in,” and replace “from where I can learn new things” with “because I could learn new things.” Try to reduce fillers such as “uh” and use a clear topic sentence followed by a specific example.

示例: Yes, I did. I was quite adventurous as a child, so I tried activities such as swimming and drawing whenever I had the chance. For example, I joined a swimming class at the age of eight, and it helped me become more confident.

建议: Give your opinion in a more natural way by saying “Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities.” The phrase “get to know your choice” is unclear; use “discover what they enjoy” or “find out what suits them.” Avoid repeating “try” and “thing,” and add a specific example or result to make the answer more effective. Use a linking word such as “because” or “for example” to connect your reason smoothly.

示例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover what they truly enjoy and what suits their abilities. For example, someone who experiments with different sports may eventually find one that keeps them fit and motivated.

× Yes, I certainly did get chances, uh, to take part in new activities since I'm a very opportunist, uh, person.

✓ Yes, I certainly did get chances, uh, to take part in new activities since I'm a very opportunistic person.

Opportunist is normally a noun referring to a person who takes advantage of opportunities. The adjective form opportunistic is needed to describe the noun person. Use opportunistic person rather than opportunist person.

× So whenever I get the chance, I do involve in something from where I can learn new things.

✓ So whenever I get the chance, I get involved in something from which I can learn new things.

Involve is normally a transitive verb and needs an object, as in involve myself in an activity. The expression get involved in requires the past participle involved. Also, from which is more grammatically appropriate than from where when referring to an activity or experience rather than a place.

× I believe if you try many things in your life then you get to know your choice.

✓ I believe that if you try many things in your life, you get to know your preferences.

When referring to the different activities or options a person may like, the plural noun preferences is more appropriate than the singular noun choice. Use preferences when discussing several likes or interests.