机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答有直接回应问题，也列举了跳舞和游泳，但句子结构不完整，存在明显语法和词汇错误。“my mother is a lawyer, encouraged”应改为“my mother is a lawyer, and she encouraged me”；“shopping new things”表达不自然，应改为“trying new things”。此外，结尾“and”没有完成句子，影响流利度。建议使用“主旨句+具体例子+结果”的结构，并说明参加这些活动的时间或个人感受。

示例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. My mother encouraged me to take part in activities such as dancing and swimming. I especially enjoyed swimming because it helped me become more confident and energetic.

建议: 回答表达了同意的观点，但语法、词汇和逻辑问题较多。“become confident and happiness”应改为“become more confident and happier”或“gain confidence and happiness”；“new things will borrow you”意思不清，可能想表达“new experiences will broaden your horizons”。回答中有较多重复和填充词，且缺少具体例子。建议使用“观点+原因+例子/结果”的结构，并用“because”和“For example”连接信息。

示例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities. New experiences can help them become more confident and broaden their horizons. For example, someone who joins a sports club may discover a new talent and make new friends.

× Yes, because my mother is a lawyer, encouraged me to, uh, shopping new things and, uh, let me have new activities, uh, just like dancing, swimming and.

✓ Yes, because my mother is a lawyer, she encouraged me to try new things and let me take part in new activities, such as dancing and swimming.

原句中“because my mother is a lawyer”后面直接接“encouraged”，缺少主句主语，句子结构不完整。另外，最后的“and”没有连接后续内容，造成句子残缺。可以补充主语“she”，并删除未完成的“and”。

× Yes, because my mother is a lawyer, encouraged me to, uh, shopping new things and, uh, let me have new activities, uh, just like dancing, swimming and.

✓ Yes, because my mother is a lawyer, she encouraged me to try new things and let me take part in new activities, such as dancing and swimming.

“encourage someone to”后面要接动词原形，不能接“shopping”。这里应使用“to try”。注意：“encourage someone to do something”是固定结构，例如“encouraged me to try new activities”。

× Uh, yes, I think if you try many different things, you can become confident and happiness, uh, because new things, uh, will borrow you, umm, new things.

✓ Yes, I think that if you try many different things, you can become confident and happy because new experiences can broaden your horizons.

“confident”是形容词，但“happiness”是名词，两个词在“become”后面不平行。应将名词“happiness”改为形容词“happy”，与“confident”保持一致。

× Uh, yes, I think if you try many different things, you can become confident and happiness, uh, because new things, uh, will borrow you, umm, new things.

✓ Yes, I think that if you try many different things, you can become confident and happy because new experiences can broaden your horizons.

原句后半部分“because new things ... will borrow you ... new things”表达不完整，且有重复和不清楚的句子结构。回答问题时，应使用完整的原因从句，例如“because new experiences can broaden your horizons”。