机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Use the past tense consistently because you are talking about your childhood: change “have” to “had,” “play” to “played,” and “helps” to “helped.” Also, say “new activities” instead of the vague phrase “those activities.” Add a comma before “which” to make the sentence clearer. Your answer is relevant and includes a specific example, but it could be slightly more natural and grammatically accurate.

示例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I often played basketball with my friends after school, which helped me make friends and develop my teamwork skills.

建议: Avoid repeating “I think” and “in my perspective,” since they express the same idea. Use a clear structure: give your opinion, provide a reason, and explain the result. Replace the confusing phrase “see what they realize and how they what they're good at” with “discover what they enjoy and what they are good at.” Use “if people try” rather than “if people will be able to try” for a more natural conditional sentence.

示例: Definitely. I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and strengths. For example, someone might try volunteering, cooking, or playing a sport and eventually find a skill they really enjoy developing.

× Yes, I have several opportunities to take part in those activities as a child.

✓ Yes, I had several opportunities to take part in those activities as a child.

The phrase as a child refers to a finished period in the past, so the past-tense form had is required instead of the present-tense form have.

× For example, I often play basketball with my friends after school which helps me make friends and improve my teamwork skills.

✓ For example, I often played basketball with my friends after school, which helped me make friends and improve my teamwork skills.

Because the question asks about childhood, the answer should use the past tense. Therefore, play changes to played and helps changes to helped. A comma is also added before the nonessential relative clause.

× Definitely. I think in my perspective, I think if people will be able to try as many things as they can, they will see what they realize and how they what they're good at.

✓ Definitely. I think that if people try as many different things as they can, they will discover what they enjoy and what they are good at.

The original sentence repeats I think, uses the unnatural phrase in my perspective, and contains an incomplete and unclear clause: how they what they're good at. The corrected version uses one clear reporting phrase, the first conditional structure if people try ..., they will ..., and the parallel phrases what they enjoy and what they are good at.