机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答内容切题，也提供了具体活动和父母的支持，但有明显语法和搭配错误。应将“Thanks for my parents”改为“Thanks to my parents”，将“Those attempts in inspire me interests”改为“Those experiences inspired my interest in...”。此外，“performing or dancing”表达不够自然，可以说“performing in school plays or learning to dance”。建议用“具体活动 + 结果”组织答案，并避免使用“and so on”等模糊表达。

示例: Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities as a child. Thanks to my parents, I learned to swim and took part in school performances. These experiences helped me become more confident and developed my interest in creative activities.

建议: 回答有明确观点，并使用了“while”进行对比，这是优点。但第二句存在多处语法和表达问题：“they had”应改为一般现在时“they have”，“others perform focusing”应改为“others prefer to focus”，“they more enjoy stable”应改为“because they prefer stability”。建议先直接回答，再说明两类人的特点，最后补充自己的看法，使逻辑更加完整。

示例: I think people should try different things, but not necessarily as many as possible. Curious and adventurous people may enjoy exploring new activities, while others prefer to focus on one or two things they are passionate about. In my opinion, trying a few new activities is a good way to discover our strengths without feeling overwhelmed.

× Thanks for my parents, they always encouraged me to try different things such as swimming, performing or dancing and so on.

✓ Thanks to my parents, they always encouraged me to try different things such as swimming, performing, or dancing.

“Thanks to”表示“多亏了……”，不能使用“Thanks for”来表达这个意思。“Thanks for”通常用于感谢某人做了某事，例如“Thanks for your help”。

× Those attempts in inspire me interests.

✓ Those attempts inspired my interest in these activities.

这段内容是在回忆童年经历，因此应该使用一般过去时。“inspire”应改为“inspired”。另外，“interest”通常用作不可数名词，表达“对某事的兴趣”时应使用“interest in”。

× Those attempts in inspire me interests.

✓ Those attempts inspired my interest in these activities.

原句中的“in”位置错误，而且“inspire me interests”结构不正确。正确结构是“inspire someone’s interest in something”，意思是“激发某人对某事的兴趣”。

× You know, some people love adventure and they had a strong sense of curiosity, while others perform focusing on just one or two things they more enjoy stable.

✓ You know, some people love adventure and have a strong sense of curiosity, while others prefer to focus on just one or two things that they enjoy more and find more stable.

这里是在描述人们通常的性格和偏好，应使用一般现在时。“had”是过去时，应改为“have”。此外，“perform focusing”不能正确表达“专注于”，应改为“prefer to focus”。

× You know, some people love adventure and they had a strong sense of curiosity, while others perform focusing on just one or two things they more enjoy stable.

✓ You know, some people love adventure and have a strong sense of curiosity, while others prefer to focus on just one or two things that they enjoy more and find more stable.

副词“more”应放在动词“enjoy”之后，构成“enjoy more”，而不能放在主语和动词之间的“they more enjoy”。建议记住：一般情况下，程度副词“more”修饰动词时放在动词或宾语之后。

× You know, some people love adventure and they had a strong sense of curiosity, while others perform focusing on just one or two things they more enjoy stable.

✓ You know, some people love adventure and have a strong sense of curiosity, while others prefer to focus on just one or two things that they enjoy more and find more stable.

“perform focusing”不是正确的英语表达；“perform”不能表示“更喜欢”。表达“更喜欢做某事”应使用“prefer to do something”。同时，“things they more enjoy stable”结构不完整，加入关系代词“that”后，句子结构更清楚。