机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly using the past tense: “No, I didn’t have many opportunities...” Avoid repeating “in my child” and use natural phrases such as “as a child” and “take part in activities.” Explain one specific reason and, if possible, give an example of an activity you avoided or one activity your school offered. Also, complete the unfinished sentence about your school and use linking words such as “because” and “although” to make the answer clearer.

示例: No, I didn’t have many opportunities to take part in new activities as a child. I was quite shy, so I usually avoided activities that involved meeting lots of new people. Although my school offered sports and music clubs, I rarely joined them because I preferred spending time with a few close friends.

建议: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with one or two specific reasons. Correct the grammar in “every people,” “mindshade,” “No one are,” and “which make them”; use “everyone,” “different perspectives,” “No two people are exactly alike,” and “which makes trying new things worthwhile.” Avoid repeating the idea that people have different minds, and explain a concrete benefit, such as gaining confidence, discovering interests, or becoming more adaptable.

示例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever possible. Trying new things can help them discover hidden talents and become more confident. For example, someone who joins a public-speaking club may feel nervous at first, but they can gradually become more comfortable expressing their opinions. It also helps people become more adaptable when they face unfamiliar situations.

× No, I don't have any activity in my child.

✓ No, I didn't have any activities when I was a child.

The question asks about the student’s childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Use didn't have instead of don't have. Activities should be plural because the student is speaking generally about activities.

× because in my child I was very shy

✓ because I was very shy as a child

In my child is not the correct expression. Use as a child to describe the period when you were young. The natural word order is I was very shy as a child.

× and I don't involve in very things which I don't prefer

✓ and I didn't get involved in many activities that I did not prefer

The answer refers to the past, so use didn't get involved and did not prefer. The expression get involved in is the correct verb pattern. Many activities is also more appropriate than very things.

× I don't involve in very things

✓ I didn't get involved in many activities

Very is an adverb and cannot be used before things to express a large number. Use many before a plural countable noun such as activities.

× and main thing my school have

✓ Most importantly, my school did not have many activities.

The original phrase is incomplete and does not have a clear sentence structure. Most importantly correctly introduces the main point, and the sentence needs a subject, verb, and object. Because the answer describes childhood, did not have is appropriate.

× I think every people should try new things

✓ I think everyone should try new things

Every must be followed by a singular countable noun, as in every person. Alternatively, use the pronoun everyone, which already has the required singular form.

× No one are similar in this world

✓ No one is similar in this world

No one is grammatically singular, so it must be followed by the singular verb is, not the plural verb are.

× all have their own mind and own personality which make them very good for trying new

✓ Everyone has their own mindset and personality, which makes them willing to try new things.

Everyone is singular, so use has instead of have. The relative pronoun which refers to the whole preceding idea, so the singular verb makes is required. The sentence also needs the noun things after new to complete the phrase try new things.