机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Responde directamente, mas a expressão “that’s the motive why” não é natural neste contexto; utiliza “that’s why” ou “the main reason was that”. Evita a formulação pouco clara “practicing your hobbies” e dá exemplos mais adequados de actividades, como aulas de música ou desporto. Além disso, “meeting up with friends ... to go to a restaurant” não é exactamente uma actividade nova para uma criança. Organiza a resposta com uma ideia principal, uma razão e um exemplo específico; uma resposta mais curta e precisa seria mais eficaz.

示例: Not really, to be honest. My parents were struggling financially when I was growing up, so I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities. For example, I never took music lessons or joined a sports club because they were too expensive.

建议: A resposta apresenta uma opinião clara e exemplos, mas há erros de estrutura e colocação: diz “try different activities” ou “be exposed to different activities”, não “be exposed and tried on”. Substitui “acquire a knowledge” por “gain a better understanding” e evita repetir “what they like”. Usa um conector mais natural, como “For instance”, e explica brevemente o benefício de experimentar actividades diferentes, por exemplo descobrir talentos ou interesses pessoais.

示例: Yes, definitely, although people don’t need to try absolutely everything. Trying different activities helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. For instance, children could experiment with art, music and various sports before deciding what they enjoy most. This can also help them become more confident and open-minded.

× Not really to be honest, my parents were struggling with income when I was growing up, so I guess that's the motive why I was not exposed to different activities such as practicing your hobbies and also meeting up with friends after school to go to a restaurant.

✓ Not really, to be honest. My parents were struggling financially when I was growing up, so I guess that is why I was not exposed to different activities, such as practising my hobbies or meeting up with friends after school to go to a restaurant.

The possessive pronoun your does not agree with the speaker's perspective. Since the student is talking about personal hobbies, my should be used instead. The correction also uses practising and meeting up in a parallel structure after such as.

× Well definitely, I believe that they should be exposed and tried on different activities and hobbies just to see what they like.

✓ Well, definitely. I believe that they should try different activities and hobbies to see what they like.

The expression should be exposed and tried is grammatically and logically incorrect because people try activities; activities are not tried on by people in this context. Use the active structure they should try. Also, try is followed directly by the object, so the preposition on is unnecessary.

× Well definitely, I believe that they should be exposed and tried on different activities and hobbies just to see what they like.

✓ Well, definitely. I believe that they should try different activities and hobbies to see what they like.

The preposition on is incorrect after try when referring to activities or hobbies. The correct structure is try something, without a preposition.

× So for example when you're growing up you should be trying artistic things and also different sports just to acquire a knowledge of what you want and what you like.

✓ So, for example, when you are growing up, you should try artistic activities and different sports just to acquire knowledge of what you want and like.

Knowledge is an uncountable noun when it refers to general understanding, so it does not normally take the indefinite article a. Therefore, acquire knowledge is correct, not acquire a knowledge.