机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm và đưa ra các hoạt động cụ thể như học nhạc và vẽ. Tuy nhiên, câu đầu bị nối sai bằng dấu phẩy sau “Yes”; nên dùng “Because my mother was a teacher, ...” hoặc tách thành hai câu. “Develop my skill” nên sửa thành “develop my skills”, còn “in choice” không tự nhiên và nên thay bằng “more confident in making choices” hoặc “more open-minded”. Bạn cũng nên bổ sung một chi tiết cụ thể về một hoạt động hoặc kết quả đạt được để câu trả lời tự nhiên và thuyết phục hơn.

示例: Yes, I did. Because my mother was a teacher, she encouraged me to try different activities, such as music lessons and painting. I particularly enjoyed painting because it helped me become more creative and confident. As a result, I became more open-minded and willing to learn new things.

建议: Bạn đưa ra quan điểm cân bằng “Yes and no”, sau đó giải thích hợp lý và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể. Tuy nhiên, “necessible” phải viết là “necessary”, “discover their interest” nên sửa thành “discover their interests” hoặc “find out what they enjoy”, và “two or three hobbies that you enjoy or are good at” có thể diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn là “a few hobbies they genuinely enjoy or have a talent for”. Hãy dùng từ nối rõ hơn như “However” hoặc “Once they find something they like”. Bạn cũng có thể giải thích ngắn gọn lợi ích của việc tập trung để câu trả lời có chiều sâu hơn.

示例: I think people should try a variety of activities at first so they can discover their interests. However, once they find something they enjoy, it is better to focus on two or three hobbies. This allows them to improve their skills instead of spreading themselves too thin. For instance, I have tried painting, running and photography, but I now spend most of my free time on running and photography.

× Yes, because my mother was a teacher, she always encouraged me to try new activities such as music lessons and painting to develop my skill and confidence as well.

✓ Yes, because my mother was a teacher, she always encouraged me to try new activities such as music lessons and painting to develop my skills and confidence as well.

The noun skills should be plural because the student is referring to multiple abilities, such as artistic ability and personal ability. When referring to more than one ability, use the plural form skills.

× Yes, because my mother was a teacher, she always encouraged me to try new activities such as music lessons and painting to develop my skill and confidence as well. As a result, I became more open to learning different things and in choice.

✓ Yes, because my mother was a teacher, she always encouraged me to try new activities such as music lessons and painting to develop my skills and confidence as well. As a result, I became more open to learning different things and making choices.

The phrase in choice is not grammatically correct in this sentence. Making choices uses the -ing form to create a parallel structure with learning: open to learning different things and making choices. After the preposition to in open to, a gerund is used because to is part of the expression open to, not an infinitive marker.

× Yes and no, I think people should try a variety of activities to discover their interest, but then it's necessible to focus on two or three hobbies that you enjoy or are good at.

✓ Yes and no, I think people should try a variety of activities to discover their interests, but then it's necessary to focus on two or three hobbies that they enjoy or are good at.

The noun interests should be plural because people may have more than one area of interest. The pronoun they is also used to maintain agreement with the plural subject people.

× Yes and no, I think people should try a variety of activities to discover their interest, but then it's necessible to focus on two or three hobbies that you enjoy or are good at.

✓ Yes and no, I think people should try a variety of activities to discover their interests, but then it's necessary to focus on two or three hobbies that they enjoy or are good at.

Necessible is not the correct adjective in standard English. The correct adjective is necessary, which means required or important to do. Also, necessary is followed by the infinitive structure to focus.