机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 질문에 직접 답하기 위해 먼저 어린 시절 새로운 활동을 해 볼 기회가 있었는지 명확하게 말하세요. ‘As in my childhood’와 ‘opportunities to take part in’의 반복을 피하고, ‘I had many opportunities…’처럼 정확한 문장을 사용해야 합니다. 또한 ‘be interested in + 동명사’를 사용하여 ‘I wasn’t interested in trying new activities’라고 표현하세요. 기회를 가졌지만 참여하지 않았다는 이유를 한 가지 구체적으로 설명하고, ‘because’로 자연스럽게 연결하면 답변이 더 효과적입니다.

示例: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. However, I wasn’t very interested in them because I was shy and preferred playing with familiar friends. For example, I once joined a swimming class, but I stopped going after a few weeks.

建议: ‘Yes’라고 답한 뒤, 사람들이 다양한 것을 시도해야 하는 이유를 먼저 제시하세요. 현재 답변은 ‘football basketball all study’가 문법적으로 불완전하고 의미가 불분명하므로, ‘sports, academic subjects, and creative activities’처럼 병렬 구조를 사용해야 합니다. ‘For example’이나 ‘because’와 같은 연결어를 활용해 구체적인 예와 결과를 덧붙이세요. 2~4개의 명확한 문장으로 답하면 더 자연스럽고 효과적입니다.

示例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever possible. They can explore different sports, academic subjects, and creative hobbies, such as football, science, or painting. By doing this, they may discover their talents and learn more about what they really enjoy.

× As in my childhood I actually have many opportunities to take part in but actually I am not interested in to take part in the new activities because I don't know what can I do.

✓ When I was a child, I actually had many opportunities to take part in new activities, but I was not interested in trying them because I did not know what I could do.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the past tense is needed. Use was instead of am, had instead of have, was not instead of am not, did not know instead of do not know, and could instead of can. Also, in the indirect question, use the word order what I could do, not what can I do.

× As in my childhood I actually have many opportunities to take part in but actually I am not interested in to take part in the new activities because I don't know what can I do.

✓ When I was a child, I actually had many opportunities to take part in new activities, but I was not interested in trying them because I did not know what I could do.

After the preposition in, use a gerund with -ing. Therefore, interested in to take part in is incorrect. Use interested in taking part in or, more naturally here, interested in trying them.

× As in my childhood I actually have many opportunities to take part in but actually I am not interested in to take part in the new activities because I don't know what can I do.

✓ When I was a child, I actually had many opportunities to take part in new activities, but I was not interested in trying them because I did not know what I could do.

The opening phrase As in my childhood is not a natural sentence structure. Use When I was a child. In addition, take part in needs an object, so add new activities. The sentence should also use a clear conjunction to connect the two contrasting ideas.

× Yes, people can try many different things, such as football basketball all study

✓ Yes, people should try many different things, such as playing football, playing basketball, and studying.

The examples should use parallel grammatical forms. Because these are activities, use playing football, playing basketball, and studying. The verb study should be changed to the -ing form studying to match the other activity phrases.

× Yes, people can try many different things, such as football basketball all study

✓ Yes, people should try many different things, such as playing football, playing basketball, and studying.

The question asks whether people should try different things, so should is the most appropriate modal verb in the answer. Can expresses ability or possibility, whereas should expresses advice or recommendation.