机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and avoid self-correction and unfinished sentences. Use the past tense consistently: say “I don’t remember whether I had…” and “I danced twice a week,” rather than “I have” or “I was dancing.” Add one specific detail, such as where you danced, who encouraged you, or how you felt about it. Use a linking word such as “because” or “so” to connect your experience to its result.

示例: I don’t remember taking part in many new activities as a child, but I did attend dance classes. I danced twice a week at a local studio, and my parents encouraged me to continue. I enjoyed it because it helped me become more confident.

建议: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with two logically connected reasons. Avoid repeating “confident” and “dance,” and replace informal fillers such as “yeah” with a complete explanation. Since you are discussing people in general, use “they” consistently instead of switching to “you.” You could mention that trying new activities helps people discover their interests and develop useful skills.

示例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because it helps them discover what they enjoy and become more confident. For example, dancing can improve self-expression and make people feel more comfortable around others. Even if an activity is not suitable for them, they can learn something valuable from the experience.

× I don't remember if I have if I had any opportunities to take part in new activities.

✓ I don't remember if I had any opportunities to take part in new activities.

The sentence refers to opportunities that existed in the student's childhood, so the past-tense form had is required. The phrase have if is also an incorrect repetition and should be removed.

× I was dancing when I was little. I was dancing twice a week.

✓ I danced when I was little. I danced twice a week.

The student is describing a regular past activity. The simple past tense danced is more appropriate for repeated actions in the past. The past progressive was dancing usually describes an action in progress at a particular past moment.

× I remember only this and this is

✓ This is the only thing I remember.

The original sentence ends with the incomplete phrase this is and does not express a complete idea. A complete sentence needs a clear subject and verb, so This is the only thing I remember is a suitable correction.

× I think they should because it makes you confident, you feel free and yeah.

✓ I think they should because trying different things makes you feel confident and free.

The original sentence joins multiple independent ideas with commas, creating a comma splice. Combining the ideas into one grammatically complete sentence makes the structure clearer. The phrase makes you feel confident is also more natural than makes you confident.

× I was dancing because it makes me feel confident.

✓ I danced because it made me feel confident.

The student is explaining a reason for dancing in the past, so both verbs should be in the past tense: danced and made. Using consistent tense makes the time reference clear.