机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question more directly and use clearer grammatical structures. Say “I was quite a shy child,” not “I was quite shy child,” and replace “while I was a child we were not having” with “when I was young, my school did not offer.” Also, explain whether your limited opportunities were caused by shyness, the lack of school programs, or both. Avoid the awkward phrase “as very famous activities” and connect your reasons with linking words such as “because” and “in addition.”

示例: Not really. I was quite a shy child, and my school did not offer many extracurricular activities. For example, sports such as swimming, basketball, and badminton were not available, so I mainly focused on my studies. In addition, I was too nervous to join activities outside school.

建议: Your opinion is clear, but some expressions are unnatural and the final sentence is grammatically inaccurate. Replace “add up our abilities” with “develop our abilities,” “building new activities” with “trying new activities,” and “look forward” with “keep learning” or “look ahead.” Organize the answer with a direct opinion, one clear reason, and a specific example or result. Avoid repeating “changing” and use a linking phrase such as “For example” to make the answer more effective.

示例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever possible. Trying new things helps us develop different skills and become more adaptable in a rapidly changing world. For example, learning a new language or taking up a sport can improve both our confidence and our communication skills. It can also help us discover interests that we did not know we had.

× I was quite shy child.

✓ I was quite a shy child.

The singular countable noun child needs an article. Use a before child because it is an indefinite reference to one child.

× I didn't have a lot of opportunities to take part.

✓ I didn't have a lot of opportunities to take part in activities.

The expression take part normally needs the preposition in before the activity or event that someone joins. For example, take part in sports or take part in a competition.

× While I was a child, we were not having activities like swimming, basketball or badminton as very famous activities.

✓ When I was a child, we did not have activities such as swimming, basketball, or badminton.

Use the simple past did not have to describe a general situation that existed during a finished period in the past. The past continuous were not having is not appropriate for this general fact.

× In our school it was not allowed to do so.

✓ At our school, we were not allowed to do so.

The people who were prohibited from doing the activity are we, so we should be the subject of the passive construction. Use were not allowed, not it was not allowed. The phrase at our school is also the more natural prepositional expression for referring to a school.

× We need to always look forward and building new activities will help us to change with the rapidly changing environment.

✓ We need to always look forward to building new skills, and this will help us adapt to the rapidly changing environment.

Look forward to is followed by a gerund ending in -ing, so use look forward to building. The word to here is a preposition, not part of an infinitive. Also, building skills is grammatically and logically more appropriate than building activities in this context.