机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答直接回应了问题，也提供了音乐俱乐部的例子，但存在较多语法和表达问题：应使用过去时“had”，而不是“have”；“when I was the child”应改为“when I was a child”；“used to enjoying”应改为“used to enjoy”；“my parents encouraging me make better”句子不完整，应改为“my parents encouraged me to improve my musical skills”。建议使用“especially”或“because”等连接词补充具体细节，并说明参加活动带来的结果。

示例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. For example, I joined my school’s music club and learned to play the guitar. My parents encouraged me to practise regularly, so I gradually became more confident. It was a very enjoyable experience.

建议: 观点明确，给出了原因和个人例子，内容比较充分。不过需要改进语法、词汇准确性和句子连接：主语“it”后应使用“discover”；“sport music and programming”应列举为“sports, music and programming”；“one hobby I really like it”应改为“a hobby I really liked”；最后一句过长且不自然，可以用“However”分开，表达“没有必要同时尝试所有事情”。建议增加具体结果，例如通过尝试不同活动发现自己真正喜欢编程，从而使答案更加有效。

示例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them develop new skills and discover their interests. For instance, when I was a student, I tried sports, music and programming. As a result, I realised that programming was the hobby I enjoyed most. However, people do not need to try everything at the same time, because that can be stressful.

× Yes, well I have many chances to try new activities when I was the child.

✓ Yes, well, I had many chances to try new activities when I was a child.

“When I was...”描述的是过去的经历，因此主句中的“have”也要使用过去式“had”。

× Yes, well I have many chances to try new activities when I was the child.

✓ Yes, well, I had many chances to try new activities when I was a child.

这里的“a child”表示“一个孩子时期”，是泛指，不能使用定冠词“the”。固定表达是“when I was a child”。

× For example, I used to enjoying my school music club and my parents encouraging me make better

✓ For example, I used to enjoy my school music club, and my parents encouraged me to do better.

“used to”后面必须接动词原形，所以“enjoying”应改为“enjoy”。例如：“I used to play tennis.”

× For example, I used to enjoying my school music club and my parents encouraging me make better

✓ For example, I used to enjoy my school music club, and my parents encouraged me to do better.

这句话讲述的是童年时期的经历，因此“encouraging”应改为一般过去式“encouraged”。

× For example, I used to enjoying my school music club and my parents encouraging me make better

✓ For example, I used to enjoy my school music club, and my parents encouraged me to do better.

“encourage”后面通常使用“encourage someone to do something”结构，因此应说“encouraged me to do better”，不能直接说“encouraging me make better”。

× Yes, well, I think people should try many different things because it helps them learn new skills and discovers their interests.

✓ Yes, well, I think people should try many different things because it helps them learn new skills and discover their interests.

“helps”后面连接两个并列的动词，应该使用动词原形：“learn”和“discover”。因此“discovers”应改为“discover”。

× For example, when I was a student, I tried sport music and programming and I finally found one hobby I really like it so it's good to open but you don't need to try everything at the same time.

✓ For example, when I was a student, I tried sports, music, and programming, and I finally found one hobby I really like, so it's good to be open-minded, but you don't need to try everything at the same time.

“sports”表示体育运动这一类活动，通常使用复数形式。说多个活动时，也要注意用逗号分隔并列项目。

× For example, when I was a student, I tried sport music and programming and I finally found one hobby I really like it so it's good to open but you don't need to try everything at the same time.

✓ For example, when I was a student, I tried sports, music, and programming, and I finally found one hobby I really like, so it's good to be open-minded, but you don't need to try everything at the same time.

“I really like”后面的关系从句已经有宾语“one hobby”，所以不能再加代词“it”。应说“a hobby I really like”，而不是“a hobby I really like it”。

× For example, when I was a student, I tried sport music and programming and I finally found one hobby I really like it so it's good to open but you don't need to try everything at the same time.

✓ For example, when I was a student, I tried sports, music, and programming, and I finally found one hobby I really like, so it's good to be open-minded, but you don't need to try everything at the same time.

“it's good to open”结构不完整；如果想表达“保持开放的态度是好的”，应说“it's good to be open-minded”。同时，多个完整意思需要使用逗号和连词连接，使句子结构更清晰。