机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Ответ соответствует вопросу и содержит причину, но есть несколько проблем с естественностью и точностью слов. Вместо “Yes, I had” лучше сказать “Yes, I did” или “Yes, I had plenty of opportunities”. Слово “sections” здесь неверно; используйте “activities”, “classes” или названия конкретных занятий. Добавьте один конкретный пример и свяжите идеи с помощью “so” или “for example”.

示例: Yes, I did. My parents wanted to broaden my horizons, so they encouraged me to try different activities, such as swimming and drawing. For example, I attended a painting class for several months, and I really enjoyed it.

建议: Ответ хорошо выражает мнение, объясняет причину и приводит личный пример, но предложение слишком длинное и содержит неестественные конструкции. После “what” нужен прямой порядок слов: “what you will enjoy”. Вместо “unexpected experience could be changing” лучше сказать “an unexpected experience can be life-changing”. Разделите ответ на 3–4 коротких предложения и используйте связку “for example” перед личным опытом.

示例: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible. You never know what you will enjoy until you give it a try, and an unexpected experience can sometimes be life-changing. For example, I started volunteering last year and discovered that I really enjoy helping other people.

× Yes I had because my parents always wanted to broaden my horizons so they took me to many sections.

✓ Yes, I did, because my parents always wanted to broaden my horizons, so they took me to many sections.

The question begins with the auxiliary verb did: Did you have...? Therefore, the short answer should use did, not had. Use did to avoid repeating the main verb have in a short answer.

× Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because you don't know in advance what will you enjoy and sometimes unexpected experience could be changing because I tried volunteering last year and I really enjoyed it.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because you do not know in advance what you will enjoy, and sometimes an unexpected experience could be life-changing because I tried volunteering last year and I really enjoyed it.

In an indirect question after you do not know, the word order must be subject + verb: what you will enjoy, not what will you enjoy. In indirect questions, do not use question word order.

× Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because you don't know in advance what will you enjoy and sometimes unexpected experience could be changing because I tried volunteering last year and I really enjoyed it.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because you do not know in advance what you will enjoy, and sometimes an unexpected experience could be life-changing because I tried volunteering last year and I really enjoyed it.

Unexpected experience is a singular countable noun phrase, so it needs an article. Use an because unexpected begins with a vowel sound: an unexpected experience.

× Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because you don't know in advance what will you enjoy and sometimes unexpected experience could be changing because I tried volunteering last year and I really enjoyed it.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because you do not know in advance what you will enjoy, and sometimes an unexpected experience could be life-changing because I tried volunteering last year and I really enjoyed it.

Changing does not express the intended meaning here. The adjective life-changing means having a strong or important effect on someone's life. Use life-changing to describe an experience that can significantly affect you.