机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Ответ соответствует вопросу, но содержит много грамматических и лексических ошибок: «do part in» нужно заменить на «take part in», «dances classes» — на «dance classes», а «musics» — на «music classes». Выражение «as a statue liquor» непонятно и должно быть удалено или заменено точным названием занятия. Используйте чёткую структуру: прямой ответ, затем 1–2 конкретных примера и результат. Также исправьте формы глаголов: «made a lot of friends» и «tried new things».

示例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child, such as dance and music classes. I particularly enjoyed dancing because it helped me make new friends and become more confident. I also liked trying new things, even when they were challenging at first.

建议: Идея понятна, но первая фраза должна быть «People should try as many different things as they can». Конструкция «what skills you can do» неверна: лучше сказать «which skills they can develop» или «what they are good at». Последнее предложение содержит повторения и не завершает мысль; замените его конкретным результатом, например развитием уверенности или обнаружением нового хобби. Добавьте связку «For example» или «As a result», чтобы ответ звучал логичнее.

示例: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can. By doing this, they can discover their interests and find out which skills they are good at. For example, someone who tries photography may realise that they have a talent for taking pictures. It can also make people more confident and open-minded.

× Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to do part in as a child such as dances, musics or jazz class as a statue liquor.

✓ Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to take part in activities as a child, such as dance, music, and jazz classes.

The correct expression is take part in, not do part in. Also, dance and music are used as activity names here, while classes should be plural because more than one type of class is mentioned.

× I had dances classes I think thanks to dancers classes I made a lot of friend and try new.

✓ I took dance classes, and I think that, thanks to them, I made a lot of friends and tried new things.

Dance is used as an adjective before classes, so it should be singular: dance classes. Friends must be plural after a lot of because the speaker refers to several people. The expression tried new things is also complete and grammatical.

× I had dances classes I think thanks to dancers classes I made a lot of friend and try new.

✓ I took dance classes, and I think that, thanks to them, I made a lot of friends and tried new things.

The question asks about childhood experiences, so the past tense is required. The verb try must change to its past form tried.

× I think people should try different things as they can.

✓ I think people should try as many different things as they can.

The fixed structure is as many + plural countable noun + as they can. Things is a plural countable noun, so many is required.

× If you do not try different things, you never know what things you like or what skills you can do.

✓ If you do not try different things, you will never know what you like or what skills you can develop.

For a possible future result after an if-clause, use will in the main clause: you will never know. The phrase skills you can do is incorrect because skills are developed, learned, or used; they are not done.

× As many skills you learn, you you learn, you learn things.

✓ The more skills you learn, the more you learn.

The original sentence repeats you learn and does not form a complete comparison. The correct structure is the more ..., the more ..., which shows that one increasing amount leads to another.

× As many skills you learn, you you learn, you learn things.

✓ The more skills you learn, the more you learn.

When comparing two related increases, use the comparative structure the more ..., the more .... As many does not express this meaning correctly.