机会— Part 1 评分报告
对话
Part 1
考官
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
考生
When I was a junior high school student, I tried to join a baseball club because my friend recommend me to join Africa graph. It is very trying for me.
考官
Should people try as many different things as they can?
考生
Yes, I think that people should try many different things because it is it can be many point of views
评估
总分
Part 1
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
分数: 35.0建议: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、内容が十分に伝わりにくいです。まず、質問に直接答えるために “Yes, I did.” と始めましょう。過去の話なので “recommend” は “recommended”、“It is” は “It was” にします。また、“Africa graph” は文脈上 “a baseball club” などの表現が適切です。最後に、活動について具体的な感想や結果を加えると、より自然で効果的な回答になります。
示例: Yes, I did. When I was in junior high school, I joined a baseball club because one of my friends recommended it to me. It was quite challenging at first, but I enjoyed learning new skills and playing with my teammates.
Should people try as many different things as they can?
分数: 40.0建议: 意見は述べられていますが、文が途中で崩れており、理由が不明確です。“because it can give people many different points of view” のように正確に表現しましょう。さらに、異なる活動を試すことで得られる具体的な結果や例を加えると、内容がより説得力を持ちます。“For example” や “As a result” などの linking words も活用してください。
示例: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible. By doing so, they can gain new experiences and develop different points of view. For example, trying a new sport or learning a language can help them become more confident and open-minded.
语法
× because my friend recommend me to join Africa graph.
✓ because my friend recommended me to join Africa graph.
The sentence describes a past experience, so the past-tense form recommended is needed instead of the present-tense form recommend.
× It is very trying for me.
✓ It was very trying for me.
Because the student is talking about an experience in the past, the past-tense form was should be used instead of is.
× because it is it can be many point of views
✓ because they can offer many points of view
The original clause contains two unnecessary verb structures, is and can, which makes the sentence grammatically incomplete and confusing. Use the clear structure subject + modal verb + base verb: they can offer.
× because it is it can be many point of views
✓ because they can offer many points of view
The pronoun should refer to many different things, so the plural pronoun they is more appropriate than it.
× because it is it can be many point of views
✓ because they can offer many points of view
After many, use the plural noun points. Also, the standard expression is points of view, not points of views.
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