机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating the same idea. Use natural expressions such as “There weren’t many opportunities” instead of “there is nothing anything special.” Also, use the correct verb pattern “participate in” without “it,” and replace unclear words such as “exceive” and “usual.” Add one specific example of an activity you did or could not do.

示例: Not really. I grew up in a small village, so there weren’t many opportunities to try new activities. However, I occasionally played football with other children and helped my family in the garden. I think those simple activities were still enjoyable and useful.

建议: State your opinion clearly at the beginning, then support it with a reason and a specific example. Use natural collocations such as “try different things,” “focus on one career,” and “create an imbalance in their lives.” The phrase “stick it for one” is incorrect; say “stick to one” or “focus on one.” Improve coherence by using linking words such as “however” and “for example.”

示例: Yes, I think people should try different things, especially when they are young, because this helps them discover their interests and strengths. However, when it comes to their careers, they may need to focus on one main profession in order to develop expertise. For example, someone might try several part-time jobs before choosing the career that suits them best.

× Actually, I live in a village and there is nothing anything special that I can participate in it, so I would say there is nothing any exceive or any usual thing that I take part in any activity.

✓ Actually, I lived in a village, and there was nothing special that I could participate in, so I would say that there were no exciting or unusual activities for me to take part in.

The question refers to your childhood, so the past tense is more appropriate. Use lived, was, could, and were instead of live, is, can, and are. Keep the tense consistent when describing past experiences.

× Actually, I live in a village and there is nothing anything special that I can participate in it, so I would say there is nothing any exceive or any usual thing that I take part in any activity.

✓ Actually, I lived in a village, and there was nothing special that I could participate in, so I would say that there were no exciting or unusual activities for me to take part in.

Nothing cannot be followed by anything in this structure. Also, any is not suitable in the phrase there is nothing any exciting. Use nothing special and no exciting or unusual activities instead.

× Actually, I live in a village and there is nothing anything special that I can participate in it, so I would say there is nothing any exceive or any usual thing that I take part in any activity.

✓ Actually, I lived in a village, and there was nothing special that I could participate in, so I would say that there were no exciting or unusual activities for me to take part in.

The relative pronoun that already refers to the activity, so the additional pronoun it is unnecessary. Say participate in, not participate in it, after the relative clause.

× Actually, I live in a village and there is nothing anything special that I can participate in it, so I would say there is nothing any exceive or any usual thing that I take part in any activity.

✓ Actually, I lived in a village, and there was nothing special that I could participate in, so I would say that there were no exciting or unusual activities for me to take part in.

The adjective exceive is not correctly formed or used here. The intended adjective is probably exciting. In addition, unusual is needed to express the contrast with exciting activities; usual means ordinary or normal.

× In terms of exploration people can try anything they want, but in terms of profession they have to stick it for one because exploring different professions may lead to the unbalance in the life.

✓ In terms of exploration, people can try anything they want, but in terms of a profession, they have to stick to one because exploring different professions may lead to an imbalance in life.

The expression is stick to something, not stick something for one. The preposition to must follow stick when meaning continue with or remain committed to something.

× In terms of exploration people can try anything they want, but in terms of profession they have to stick it for one because exploring different professions may lead to the unbalance in the life.

✓ In terms of exploration, people can try anything they want, but in terms of a profession, they have to stick to one because exploring different professions may lead to an imbalance in life.

It does not correctly refer to the profession in this sentence. Use one to avoid repeating the singular noun profession. The correct expression is stick to one.

× In terms of exploration people can try anything they want, but in terms of profession they have to stick it for one because exploring different professions may lead to the unbalance in the life.

✓ In terms of exploration, people can try anything they want, but in terms of a profession, they have to stick to one because exploring different professions may lead to an imbalance in life.

A singular countable noun such as profession needs an article, so say a profession. The noun imbalance also needs an indefinite article because it is singular and is being mentioned generally for the first time.

× In terms of exploration people can try anything they want, but in terms of profession they have to stick it for one because exploring different professions may lead to the unbalance in the life.

✓ In terms of exploration, people can try anything they want, but in terms of a profession, they have to stick to one because exploring different professions may lead to an imbalance in life.

The definite article the is not normally used before life when referring to life in general. Say in life, not in the life, unless you mean a specific life that has already been identified.