机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 時制と表現を修正しましょう。子どもの頃の経験について聞かれているため、現在形の「I have opportunities」「I participate」ではなく、過去形の「I had opportunities」「I participated」を使います。また、「for example」の前後を整理し、具体的な経験やその結果を1文追加すると、より自然で内容のある回答になります。「Yeah」の繰り返しも避けましょう。

示例: Yes, I had the opportunity to try a new activity when I was a child. For example, I joined my school’s badminton team and learned how to work with other students. I really enjoyed it because it helped me become more active and confident.

建议: 意見は明確ですが、文法と語法に問題があります。「trying something new thing」は「trying new things」または「trying something new」、「very Inspiration」は不自然なので「inspiring」や「a great source of inspiration」を使いましょう。また、「It is because」ではなく「This is because」と続け、理由を1つに整理してください。新しい経験がどのように役立つのか、具体例や結果を加えると、論理性と語彙の評価が上がります。

示例: Yes, definitely. I think people should try different things because new experiences can broaden their horizons and help them discover their interests. For instance, someone who tries a new sport might develop a healthier lifestyle and make new friends.

× Yeah, I have opportunities for example I participate in the Badminton team. Yeah.

✓ Yes, I had the opportunity to take part in a badminton team.

The question asks about your childhood, so you should use the past tense. Use had instead of have and participated or took part instead of participate. The phrase take part in is also a natural way to describe joining an activity or team.

× It is because trying something new thing is very Inspiration people can get inspiration and it's very helpful for their life.

✓ It is because trying new things is very inspiring. People can gain inspiration from them, and they can be very helpful in people's lives.

Something new and thing cannot be used together because something already functions as a singular pronoun. Use trying new things when speaking generally about different activities. Also, people's lives is more appropriate than their life when referring to people in general.

× It is because trying something new thing is very Inspiration people can get inspiration and it's very helpful for their life.

✓ It is because trying new things is very inspiring. People can gain inspiration from them, and they can be very helpful in people's lives.

Inspiration is a noun, but an adjective is needed after very to describe trying new things. Use inspiring to mean that something gives people inspiration. Do not use the noun inspiration directly after very.

× It is because trying something new thing is very Inspiration people can get inspiration and it's very helpful for their life.

✓ It is because trying new things is very inspiring. People can gain inspiration from them, and they can be very helpful in people's lives.

The natural preposition in the expression helpful in someone's life is in, not for. However, when talking about general benefits, helpful in people's lives is the clearest expression.