机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời có cấu trúc khá rõ: trả lời trực tiếp, nêu hoạt động và đưa ví dụ cụ thể. Tuy nhiên, có nhiều lỗi dùng từ và ngữ pháp: “had chance” cần sửa thành “had a chance”, “as a chance” bị lặp và không tự nhiên, “offers” cần dùng thì quá khứ “offered”, còn “granid club” có vẻ là từ dùng sai hoặc phát âm chưa rõ. Cụm “joined it the music club” nên sửa thành “joined the music club”. Hãy diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn và giải thích rõ hoạt động này giúp bạn phát triển kỹ năng gì.

示例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my school offered a music club, so I joined it because some of my friends were members and I wanted to learn the guitar. I practiced after class twice a week, and this helped me become more confident and disciplined.

建议: Bạn đã nêu quan điểm và cố gắng đưa ví dụ, nhưng câu trả lời chưa hoàn chỉnh và khó hiểu ở phần cuối. “it's helped” cần sửa thành “it helps” khi nói về lợi ích chung; “what the lie” không đúng ngữ cảnh và có thể bạn muốn nói “about life”. Từ “printing” có lẽ không phù hợp nếu bạn muốn nói “painting”. Cần kết thúc ví dụ rõ ràng, chẳng hạn nêu kết quả của việc học nấu ăn. Hãy dùng liên từ như “For example” và “As a result” để liên kết ý, đồng thời giới hạn câu trả lời trong 3–4 câu hoàn chỉnh.

示例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them develop new skills and discover their interests. For example, I tried cooking and painting last year. As a result, I became more creative and learned how to prepare several healthy meals.

× Well, yes, I had chance to try a new activity as a chance.

✓ Well, yes, I had a chance to try a new activity.

The singular countable noun chance needs the indefinite article a. The phrase as a chance is redundant and unnatural, so it should be removed. Improvement suggestion: use have a chance to + verb when talking about an opportunity.

× My school offers a granid club and I joined it the music club because my friends were there and I wanted to learn the guitar.

✓ My school offered a granid club, and I joined the music club because my friends were there and I wanted to learn the guitar.

The answer describes childhood events, so the past tense offered is needed instead of the present tense offers. Improvement suggestion: keep the main verbs in the past tense when describing completed experiences in the past.

× My school offers a granid club and I joined it the music club because my friends were there and I wanted to learn the guitar.

✓ My school offered a granid club, and I joined the music club because my friends were there and I wanted to learn the guitar.

The pronoun it cannot be used directly before the noun phrase the music club after joined. Use joined the music club, or use joined it without naming the club again. Improvement suggestion: do not use both an object pronoun and its noun in the same position.

× Well, I think people should try different things because it's helped them learn new skills and what the lie.

✓ Well, I think people should try different things because they help people learn new skills and discover what they like.

The subject people requires the plural pronoun they, not it. Since this sentence expresses a general idea, the present tense help is appropriate. The phrase what the lie is also incorrect; what they like is the correct clause. Improvement suggestion: use they for people and use the present tense for general facts or opinions.

× For example, last year I tried cooking and printing and I read this through cooking so me more.

✓ For example, last year I tried cooking and printing, and I learned more through cooking.

The sentence refers to a completed experience last year, so the past-tense verb learned is needed. The original sentence also has an incomplete and incorrectly ordered verb phrase. Improvement suggestion: use a clear subject plus past-tense verb structure, such as I learned more through cooking.