机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp (thời thì và chia động từ), sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và rút gọn để tự nhiên hơn, và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về hoạt động. Ví dụ: dùng thì quá khứ khi nói về tuổi thơ, sửa lỗi chia động từ (were/told), loại bỏ từ thừa (‘or something like that’) và nêu 1–2 ví dụ cụ thể với liên từ để câu mạch lạc.

示例: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. My parents often encouraged me to join clubs and take part in sports such as football and swimming, and they also signed me up for singing lessons. These experiences helped me become more confident and learn to work with others.

建议: Giảm lời nói ngắt quãng (fillers), đồng nhất ngôi và thì, và làm rõ lý do với liên từ thích hợp. Sửa đại từ và cấu trúc (they → them; I can help → it can help), dùng 2–3 câu có nối để giải thích lợi ích cụ thể.

示例: Yes, I believe people should try as many different things as possible because it helps them discover new interests and develop useful skills. For example, learning a musical instrument can improve concentration, while trying team sports teaches cooperation and resilience.

× Yes, I have plenty of opportunities to join in new activities.

✓ Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to join in new activities.

The question asks about the past (Did you have?), so the student should use past tense. 'Have' (present) conflicts with the past time reference; change to 'had' to match tense. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time frame in the question; use past simple for completed past experiences.

× As a child, my parents are always tell me to participate in activity, live sports, sing, dancing or something like that.

✓ As a child, my parents always told me to participate in activities, live sports, singing, dancing or things like that.

Multiple issues: the time reference 'As a child' requires past tense ('are always tell' -> 'always told'). 'Participate in activity' should be plural 'activities'. 'Live sports' is likely 'team sports' or 'lively sports' but keeping 'live sports' may be incorrect; here we keep 'live' but better is 'team' or 'outdoor sports'. 'Sing, dancing' mixes forms; maintain parallel gerund forms: 'singing, dancing'. Suggestion: Use past simple for past habits, make noun forms plural when general, and keep parallel verb forms (gerunds) in lists.

× Uh, well, I think people should, umm, try as many different things that I can because, uh, I can help they learn new things and develop their skills.

✓ Uh, well, I think people should try as many different things as they can because it can help them learn new things and develop their skills.

Errors: 'should, umm, try as many different things that I can' mixes subjects; for general people use 'as they can'. 'I can' is incorrect here. 'I can help they learn' is ungrammatical: modal 'can help' needs object pronoun 'them' and infinitive 'learn' or 'to learn'; better: 'it can help them learn'. Suggestion: Keep subject consistency in comparisons ('people' -> 'they'), use correct object pronouns ('them'), and use 'it can help' to refer to the action generally.