机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, fix singular/plural errors, and add a brief specific example to make the answer more vivid. Use a linking word when adding the detail.

示例: Not really. I had few opportunities to try new activities as a child because my family had limited money. For example, I couldn't join after-school clubs like music or sports, so I mainly spent time helping at home.

建议: Finish the sentence and add a linking word to explain why. Provide a concise main opinion, then one or two specific reasons or an example. Avoid repetition and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, people should try many different things because it helps them learn new skills and discover their interests. For instance, trying a variety of hobbies can teach teamwork and problem-solving, which are useful in adult life.

× I didn't have much opportunities to take part in new activities as a child because growing up our family also had limited resources.

✓ I didn't have many opportunities to take part in new activities as a child because, growing up, our family also had limited resources.

The phrase 'much opportunities' is incorrect because 'opportunities' is a countable plural noun and requires 'many' rather than 'much'. Also, add commas around the participial phrase 'growing up' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'many opportunities' with plural countable nouns and insert commas for the introductory phrase to improve readability.

× Of course, people should try as many different things as they can because it will help them develop their skills which can be helpful once they become an adult and

✓ Of course, people should try as many different things as they can because it will help them develop their skills, which can be helpful once they become adults.

The original sentence is structurally incomplete and ends with a trailing 'and'. Also, 'become an adult' is singular and mismatches the plural subject 'people'; use 'become adults'. Add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which can be helpful' and remove the stray 'and'. Suggestion: complete the clause and ensure pronoun-number agreement ('people' -> 'adults') and proper punctuation for clarity.