机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 句子需要更符合语法并且更连贯。回答要直接陈述主题句，然后用1–2个具体细节支持（如时间、频率、感受或结果）。注意时态一致（过去谈童年用past tense），减少冗余，避免句子未说完。可练习使用连接词（for example, and, also）并把句子控制在最多5句内。

示例: Yes, I tried several new activities as a child. For example, I took piano lessons for three years and often played basketball with my neighbours on weekends. These experiences helped me become more disciplined and sociable.

建议: 内容要更清晰、有理有据。先给出明确的观点，然后用一到两个具体理由支持，使用连接词（because, so, therefore）并避免重复和填充词（umm）。注意代词一致（people/they），句子要流畅并完整表达“结果/好处”。

示例: Yes, I believe people should try many different things because it helps them discover new interests and skills. For instance, trying sports or music can make life more varied and enjoyable, and it may lead to new friendships and opportunities.

× Yes, I take so many acti new activities.

✓ Yes, I took so many new activities.

原句使用現在時態與句中表示過去的情境不一致（題目在問童年），應使用過去式“took”。另外有拼寫錯誤“acti new”應為“new activities”。建議：描述過去經驗時把動詞用過去式，並檢查拼寫。

× When I was child I took a piano class and go to basketball with play basketball with my neighbors.

✓ When I was a child, I took piano lessons and played basketball with my neighbors.

句中有多處時態與形式錯誤：①缺少冠詞“a child”；②“took a piano class”可以更自然為“took piano lessons”；③混用了現在式“go”與片語“play basketball”，因為是在敘述過去事件，動詞應為過去式“played”；④重複片語“go to basketball with play basketball”需刪除冗餘。建議：描述過去習慣或經歷時，所有動詞保持過去式，並避免重複表達。

× I think my life is.

✓ I think my life was interesting.

原句不完整，缺少表語使句子未表達完整意思。根據上下文描述童年經歷，應使用過去式並補充形容詞（例如“interesting”或“colorful”）來完成句子。建議：檢查句子是否包含主語和謂語以及必要的補語以表達完整意思。

× Yes, people should try many different things that they can when people came on something they really like.

✓ Yes, people should try as many different things as they can; when people come across something they really like,

原句結構混亂：①“try many different things that they can”不自然，應為固定表達“try as many different things as they can”；②“came on”用法錯誤，應為“come across”；③時態應用現在時描述一般事實，用現在式“come”。建議：使用常見搭配（as many ... as）並用正確短語“come across”。

× I think that his life will become more colorful and umm more hope hopeful for his.

✓ I think that their lives will become more colorful and more hopeful.

原句代詞和結構不正確：①用“his”不清楚指代且與前文複數不一致，應改為中性複數“their lives”或單數“his life”取決於主語；②“more hope hopeful”冗餘且語法錯誤，應為“more hopeful”；③時態用將來時可接受，但在一般陳述中常用“will become”。建議：保持代詞一致性（單複數與性別），避免冗詞，使用正確形容詞形式。