机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: You answered the question directly but there are several issues to improve: 1) Grammar and verb forms (e.g., use past tense consistently: "didn't have", "my secondary school didn't offer", "I stayed"). 2) Word choice and collocation ("extra curricular" should be "extracurricular activities"). 3) Tone and naturalness ("smartly stayed at home" sounds odd and unnatural; explain rather than judge your choice). 4) Coherence: add one linking phrase to clarify cause and effect and one specific detail to enrich the response. Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 short sentences).

示例: I didn't have many opportunities to try new activities as a child because my secondary school didn't offer extracurricular clubs. As a result, I usually stayed at home and focused on my homework. For example, I spent most evenings studying and only occasionally joined a friend's weekend sports session.

建议: Your idea is clear but the response is incomplete and has several grammatical problems: 1) Use full sentences and correct structure ("I think it depends on the person"). 2) Avoid repetition and fill in the unfinished thought. 3) Add a linking phrase and a specific reason or example to support your opinion. 4) Limit to 2–3 sentences and maintain natural phrasing.

示例: I think it depends on the person: some people enjoy trying many different things because they like variety and new experiences. Others prefer stability and a routine because it helps them feel secure and focused; for example, my sister keeps the same hobbies for years and performs better that way.

× A simple reason is my secondary school didn't offer extra curricular options, so I smartly stayed at home and focus on my homework.

✓ A simple reason is that my secondary school didn't offer extracurricular options, so I usually stayed at home and focused on my homework.

Errors: missing conjunction 'that' after 'A simple reason is', 'extracurricular' should be one word, 'smartly' is inappropriate adverb for this context and 'usually' fits frequency, and verb tense agreement: 'stayed' (past) requires 'focused' (past), not 'focus' (present). Suggestions: add 'that' to introduce the clause, write 'extracurricular' as one word, use 'usually' for habitual past actions, and keep verbs in the past tense for consistency.

× Well, personally, I think it's depends on the kind of people, some people.

✓ Well, personally, I think it depends on the kind of person.

Error: Incorrect verb form after 'it' plus subject; 'it's depends' combines contraction 'it is' with a verb that should be 'depends' only when the subject is third-person singular. The phrase is also awkward and pluralization is inconsistent. Suggestion: Use 'I think it depends on the kind of person' or 'I think it depends on the kind of people' but then adjust wording to 'the kind of person' is clearer.

× May love varieties on other hand others like stability and routine.

✓ Some may love variety; on the other hand, others prefer stability and routine.

Errors: Sentence fragments and missing subjects; 'May love varieties' lacks subject and 'varieties' is the wrong noun form—'variety' is uncountable here. Punctuation and connective 'on the other hand' needs commas and placement. Verb choice 'like' can be improved to 'prefer' for clarity. Suggestion: Add a subject 'some', use 'variety' singular/uncountable, insert proper punctuation, and use 'prefer'.

× So it's depends on the.

✓ So it depends on the person.

Errors: 'it's depends' is incorrect combination of contraction and verb—use 'it depends'. The sentence is incomplete ('on the' what?). Suggestion: Complete the idea by adding 'person' or 'individual', and use 'it depends' for correct present tense.