机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammatical accuracy (verb tenses and subject-verb agreement) and condense repetitive phrases to be more natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also avoid redundancy (e.g., “as a kid” and “when I was a child” say the same thing).

示例: Yes. My parents encouraged me to try many activities when I was young, so I learned piano and took drawing lessons. For example, I practiced piano twice a week for three years, which helped me develop concentration and a sense of rhythm.

建议: Finish your answer fully and avoid vague or incomplete endings. Provide a clear opinion in one sentence, then support it with a specific reason and a brief example, using linking words (e.g., however, because, for example). Correct small errors ("too much activities" → "too many activities").

示例: I think it depends: exploring different activities is useful because it helps you find your strengths; however, doing too many at once can prevent you from improving. For example, I once tried four clubs in one term and didn’t progress in any, so now I focus on one or two I enjoy.

× Back when I was a child, my parents always encourage me to try new things out, which includes music, drawing and sports.

✓ Back when I was a child, my parents always encouraged me to try new things out, which included music, drawing and sports.

The main clause refers to a past habitual action so the verb should be in past tense 'encouraged' rather than present 'encourage' (Third person singular issue / past tense agreement). Similarly, the relative clause lists activities that were part of that past time, so 'includes' should be 'included' to match past time. Suggestion: keep all verbs referring to that past period in past tense for consistency.

× So I learned piano and I played basketball.

✓ So I learned the piano and I played basketball.

While grammar problem type list 8 covers -ing, the actual error here is article usage before musical instrument; 'the piano' is standard when talking about learning an instrument. Use 'the' before names of musical instruments. Suggestion: say 'learned the piano' or 'took piano lessons.'

× I think it is always a good thing to explore new interests and acquire new skills but it would definitely take up a lot of time when one tries too much activities.

✓ I think it is always a good thing to explore new interests and acquire new skills, but it definitely takes up a lot of time when one tries too many activities.

Two issues: subject-verb agreement 'it would definitely take' is odd in this general present-tense opinion; use present 'it definitely takes up a lot of time' (fits present-tense general truth). Also 'too much activities' is incorrect quantifier usage; use 'too many activities' because 'activities' is countable. Suggestion: use present simple for general statements and choose 'many' with countable nouns.

× So I think it would be the best to just pick a favourite one and stick to

✓ So I think it is best to pick one favourite and stick to it.

The original sentence is incomplete and has awkward word order. 'It would be the best to just pick a favourite one and stick to' is missing the object after 'stick to.' Correct phrasing: 'pick one favourite' or 'pick a favourite one' and include 'stick to it.' Also using 'would' is unnecessary for this general recommendation; use 'is' or 'think it is best.' Suggestion: complete the clause by adding 'it' and simplify to present tense for general advice.