机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant and provides examples, but it has minor grammatical errors, a redundancy (“learn new acquire new skills”), and could be slightly more concise and natural. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, correcting grammar, and adding one brief specific detail about what you learned. Use one linking phrase to show result.

示例: Yes, I did. At school I took part in drawing competitions and cultural events, which helped me develop creativity and confidence. For example, the drawing contests improved my observation skills and the cultural shows boosted my public-speaking ability.

建议: The idea is clear, but the answer is disfluent with hesitations, repetitions, and a grammatical mistake (“learn no skills”). To improve, give a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words, complete the sentence with a clear reason, and add one specific example or consequence. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word like “because” or “so that.”

示例: Yes, I think people should try different activities because this helps them discover new interests and build practical skills. For instance, trying team sports can improve communication and teamwork, while learning music can enhance concentration.

× I participated in a drawing competition and cultural events which helped me to learn new acquire new skills.

✓ I participated in a drawing competition and cultural events which helped me to acquire new skills.

The phrase 'learn new acquire new skills' mixes two verbs incorrectly. According to the list, this is an issue with verb + -ing form usage and verb choice; here 'acquire' should follow 'helped me to' or 'helped me acquire' (base form), not 'learn new acquire'. Remove the redundant word 'learn' and keep 'acquire' in its base form after 'helped me to'. Suggestion: use 'helped me acquire new skills' or 'helped me to acquire new skills'.

× Yes, I yes, I think people should try, uh, different things so that, uh, so that they can learn no skills and it should be a.

✓ Yes, I think people should try different things so that they can learn new skills and become more confident.

This sentence contains disfluencies ('I yes, I', filler 'uh'), a wrong word 'no' instead of 'new', and an incomplete phrase 'it should be a.' These are sentence structure and word choice problems. Remove repeated words and fillers, replace 'no' with 'new', and complete the final idea. Also keep tense and modal 'should' as is. Suggestions: practice pausing instead of using fillers, plan sentence end before speaking, and replace incorrect words with intended ones ('new' not 'no').