机会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, correct grammar, and use clearer vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct errors (e.g. “primary school”, remove “John”, use “had lessons” or “been taught art”, change informal phrases like “gotta got”).

示例: Yes. When I was in primary school, my teacher encouraged me to enter a drawing competition even though I had never taken formal art lessons. As a result, I improved my confidence and surprisingly won a gold medal, which made me more willing to try new activities.

建议: Give a clear opinion and support it with a specific reason and example. Use linking words (for example, therefore, because) and correct awkward phrases (“hold our views”, “wide up views”). Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and use accurate verb forms.

示例: Yes, I believe people should try many different activities because it helps them discover new talents and broaden their perspective. For example, I entered a school art competition and realized I had a talent for drawing, which I would not have known otherwise. Therefore, experimenting with new things can lead to personal growth and new interests.

× When I was in the primary school, my teacher gave me a chance to take part in the drawing competition even though I never learned John before.

✓ When I was in primary school, my teacher gave me a chance to take part in a drawing competition even though I had never learned drawing before.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'the primary school' uses an unnecessary definite article (Article errors, but primarily sentence structure); 'the drawing competition' assumes a specific event when none was previously identified, so 'a drawing competition' is better; 'I never learned John before' is ungrammatical and likely meant 'I had never learned drawing before' — this requires past perfect to show that the learning did not occur before the opportunity. Use 'in primary school' (no 'the') and 'a drawing competition' and past perfect 'had never learned drawing' for correct sequence of events.

× But my teacher thinks I'm very good at it and I got the chance.

✓ But my teacher thought I was very good at it, so I got the chance.

Tense consistency error: the first clause should match the past context ('thinks' and 'I'm' are present), so change to past: 'thought' and 'I was'. This fixes a present/past mismatch and keeps the sentence coherent in past narrative.

× Luckily I gotta got a golden medal.

✓ Luckily I got a gold medal.

'Gotta got' is colloquial and incorrect here; use simple past 'got' in the past narrative. Also 'golden medal' is awkward in this context — the standard collocation is 'gold medal'. Remove extra auxiliary words.

× Yes, I think people should try different things.

✓ Yes, I think people should try different things.

This sentence is correct; it matches modal 'should' and present opinion. No change required.

× As for me, before taking part in the art competition, I never thought I'm really good at art, so I think trying some new things is a great way to hold our views.

✓ As for me, before taking part in the art competition, I never thought I was really good at art, so I think trying new things is a great way to broaden our views.

Tense mismatch: 'I never thought I'm' mixes past and present; change to past 'I was'. 'Trying some new things' is acceptable but 'trying new things' is more natural. 'Hold our views' is incorrect collocation — likely meant 'broaden our views' or 'change our views'; 'broaden our views' fits the intended meaning.

× It's a wide up views.

✓ It broadened my view.

This fragment is ungrammatical. 'It's a wide up views' has incorrect word order, articles, and collocation. Replace with a concise past statement that matches the narrative: 'It broadened my view' or 'It broadened my views'. Use past tense 'broadened' to match earlier past context and correct singular/plural as needed.