疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the yes/no question directly first, then give one or two clear reasons. Avoid repeating “when,” and finish your thought rather than trailing off. Use natural phrases such as “skip breakfast” and “eat healthily.”

示例: Yes, I sometimes feel tired, especially when I stay up too late or skip breakfast. I also notice that I have less energy during the day if I eat a lot of junk food.

建议: Describe a specific situation and explain why it makes you tired. The phrase “dumb my things” is unclear, so replace it with the activity you mean. Keep the answer in a consistent tense and connect the details with words such as “because” or “after that.”

示例: I feel tired on days when I have a lot to do. For example, I may have classes, prepare my own lunch, and go to the gym, so I feel worn out by the evening.

建议: Your answer gives relevant ways to relax, but the final phrase is incomplete and the repeated “and” makes it less fluent. State your main response, then give one or two activities with a clear linking phrase. Say “enjoy nature” rather than “enjoy the nature.”

示例: When I feel tired, I try to relax and clear my mind. For example, I listen to some gentle music or take a short walk outside to enjoy nature.

建议: Give a direct answer, then briefly explain what you prefer doing instead. Avoid repeating “prefer” and “or,” and make the activities grammatically parallel, for example, “reading,” “watching,” and “spending.”

示例: Usually, I prefer to stay at home rather than go out with my friends when I’m tired. I might read a book, watch a new series, or spend some time with my pets.

× I feel tired when I sleep too late and when I skip the breakfast in the mornings and especially when I eat junk food, I usually feel tired during the day but when I feel healthy when I eat healthy I feel

✓ I feel tired when I sleep too late, skip breakfast in the morning, or eat junk food. I usually feel tired during the day, but I feel healthy when I eat healthily.

Do not use the before breakfast when referring to the meal in general. Use skip breakfast. The correction also separates the run-on sentence and removes the repeated, unfinished clause so the ideas are clear.

× I feel tired when I sleep too late and when I skip the breakfast in the mornings and especially when I eat junk food, I usually feel tired during the day but when I feel healthy when I eat healthy I feel

✓ I feel tired when I sleep too late, skip breakfast in the morning, or eat junk food. I usually feel tired during the day, but I feel healthy when I eat healthily.

When describing how someone eats, use the adverb healthily to modify the verb eat. Alternatively, you could say I eat healthy food.

× I feel tired when I sleep too late and when I skip the breakfast in the mornings and especially when I eat junk food, I usually feel tired during the day but when I feel healthy when I eat healthy I feel

✓ I feel tired when I sleep too late, skip breakfast in the morning, or eat junk food. I usually feel tired during the day, but I feel healthy when I eat healthily.

The original combines several clauses without clear boundaries and repeats when in a way that makes the final idea incomplete. Separate the contrasting ideas into complete clauses, and use or to list alternative causes.

× I feel tired when I go out and had to dumb my things. Then I some days I have to go to class and I have to prepare lunch for myself then I go to gym in one day.

✓ I feel tired when I go out and have to deal with my things. Some days, I have to go to class, prepare lunch for myself, and then go to the gym.

The sentence describes a general or recurring situation, so keep the verbs in the present tense. Use have to, not had to, to match go out. Use present-tense verbs consistently when describing routines.

× I feel tired when I go out and had to dumb my things. Then I some days I have to go to class and I have to prepare lunch for myself then I go to gym in one day.

✓ I feel tired when I go out and have to deal with my things. Some days, I have to go to class, prepare lunch for myself, and then go to the gym.

Then I some days has an incorrect word order. Place the time expression before the subject: Some days, I have to.... Also, connect the actions in the list with a clear and.

× I feel tired when I go out and had to dumb my things. Then I some days I have to go to class and I have to prepare lunch for myself then I go to gym in one day.

✓ I feel tired when I go out and have to deal with my things. Some days, I have to go to class, prepare lunch for myself, and then go to the gym.

Use the before gym in this expression: go to the gym. The word gym refers to a specific kind of place here and normally takes the definite article.

× Whenever I feel tired I try to relax my mind. I usually listen to soft music and and go for a walk and enjoy the nature. I usually go and see by to

✓ Whenever I feel tired, I try to relax my mind. I usually listen to soft music, go for a walk, and enjoy nature.

Do not use the before nature when speaking about nature in general. The final words in the original are incomplete, so they cannot be reliably corrected without knowing what the speaker intended.

× Rather than seeing my friends, I prefer to prefer sitting at home and read a book or or watching a new series or spending time with my pets.

✓ Rather than seeing my friends, I prefer sitting at home, reading a book, watching a new series, or spending time with my pets.

Keep the activities after prefer in parallel forms. Since sitting is in the -ing form, use reading, watching, and spending for the other activities as well. Remove the repeated prefer and or.