疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly in the present perfect or present simple: “Yes, I often feel tired.” Avoid unnatural phrases such as “since I was a small kid, I already have” and “get out the bed.” Say “since I was a child, I have had low blood pressure” and “get out of bed.” Use one clear reason and avoid repeating similar actions such as “stand up” and “start the day.”

示例: Yes, I often feel tired, especially in the morning. I have had low blood pressure since I was a child, so getting out of bed can be difficult. It usually takes me a while to wake up and feel ready to start the day.

建议: Give a direct answer first and organize the explanation with a linking word such as “Also” or “In addition.” Correct the word order and phrasing: use “most of the time,” “right after I wake up,” “turn off my alarm,” and “makes me feel even more tired.” Avoid the long, confusing chain of actions and the unnecessary phrase “As I told you.”

示例: I usually feel tired right after I wake up, particularly when I have to get up early. Also, I feel much worse after staying up late to study or attend school activities. On those days, I often struggle to concentrate in the morning.

建议: The answer is relevant and includes a reason, but avoid repeating “chocolate” and “sugar.” Use natural expressions such as “give me a quick energy boost” instead of “boost my energy up,” and “keep going” instead of “hang on a bit more.” You could also mention another practical action, such as drinking water or taking a short break, to provide more specific content.

示例: When I feel tired, I usually eat a small piece of chocolate because it gives me a quick energy boost. If I am still exhausted, I drink some water and take a short break. These things help me regain my concentration and keep going.

建议: Start with a natural direct response, such as “Yes, usually I do.” Correct the grammar and collocations: say “I never say no to my friends,” “if they ask me to hang out,” and “stay out until late at night.” Avoid repeating “hang out” and “never say no.” Add a contrast to make the answer more balanced—for example, explain that you may leave early if you are extremely tired.

示例: Yes, I usually do because I enjoy spending time with my friends and I do not want to miss out. If they ask me to hang out, I normally join them, even if I am tired. However, if I have school the next morning, I try to leave early and get enough sleep.

× Yes, since I was a small kid, I already have low blood pressure.

✓ Yes, I have had low blood pressure since I was a small child.

Use the present perfect form have had to describe a condition that started in the past and continues in the present. Since introduces the starting point of the condition.

× So especially in morning when I wake up,

✓ So, especially in the morning when I wake up,

The phrase in the morning requires the definite article the because it refers to a specific period of the day.

× It is very hard for me to get out the bed

✓ It is very hard for me to get out of bed

The verb phrase is get out of bed, so the preposition of is required. Bed is commonly used without an article in this expression.

× Most the time is in the morning

✓ Most of the time, it is in the morning

The correct quantifier expression is most of the time. The sentence also needs the subject it before the verb is.

× After just right wake up and stop the alarm clock and see the time and stand up is the toughest time for me

✓ Just after I wake up, turn off the alarm clock, check the time, and stand up, it is the toughest time for me.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and incorrectly connected verb phrases. Use a complete subject and verb after just after, and use parallel base verbs: wake up, turn off, check, and stand up.

× Especially the days where I have to go to school until late night

✓ Especially on days when I have to go to school until late at night

Use the preposition on with days. The standard expression is late at night, which requires the preposition at.

× Such things much more fuels tired.

✓ Things like that make me feel much more tired.

The plural subject things requires the plural verb make, not fuels. The structure make me feel is also needed because feel follows make in the base form.

× Chocolates have so much sugar inside and the thing I most need is chocolate and sugars.

✓ Chocolate contains a lot of sugar, and the thing I need most is chocolate and sugar.

Chocolate and sugar are normally uncountable nouns when referring to food or ingredients, so they should not be made plural in this context. Use chocolate contains rather than chocolates have when referring to chocolate generally.

× So it can boost my energy up and give me some other motivation to hang on a bit more.

✓ So it can boost my energy and give me the motivation to keep going a bit longer.

After the modal verb can, use the base form of the verb, as in can boost and give. The phrasal verb boost my energy does not require the extra particle up.

× If my friends asked me to go hangout, hung out, I never say no and always follow them.

✓ If my friends ask me to go hang out, I never say no and always go with them.

This sentence describes a habitual situation, so use the present tense ask rather than the past tense asked. After go, use the base verb hang out. Hung out is a past-tense form and cannot follow go in this structure.

× Even until late night I drink and have fun.

✓ Even until late at night, I drink and have fun.

The standard time expression is late at night, not late night. The comma helps separate the introductory time phrase from the main clause.