疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly in the first sentence, then give one clear reason. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases such as “I’m doing studying abroad” and “listen to in English.” Use “I’m studying abroad” and “listen to lectures in English.” Also, “composition in English” is unclear in this context; say “classes taught in English.”

示例: Yes, I often feel tired because I’m studying abroad at the moment. Most of my classes are taught in English, so concentrating and taking notes can be exhausting. However, I’m gradually getting used to it.

建议: State a specific situation instead of repeating the previous answer. Use a complete structure such as “I usually feel tired when...” Correct “hear explanation about study in English” to “listen to explanations in English,” and add a result or reason to make the answer more developed.

示例: I usually feel tired after long classes, especially when the teacher explains difficult ideas in English. I have to concentrate very hard to follow the lecture and take notes at the same time. As a result, I often feel mentally exhausted afterward.

建议: The answer is relevant and gives two activities, but improve the grammar and word choice. Use parallel forms—“watch Netflix or listen to music”—and say “It helps me relax” rather than “makes me feel relaxed relief.” Add a specific example or explain why these activities help.

示例: When I feel tired, I usually watch Netflix or listen to music to relax. I normally choose a light comedy because it helps me forget about my studies for a while. After that, I usually feel refreshed and ready to continue with my work.

建议: Give a clear yes-or-no answer first, then explain the reason. The response contains several incomplete phrases and unclear expressions, including “if my friend lists my story” and “rebe my stress.” Use “if my friends listen to me talk about my problems” and “relieve my stress.” Avoid “right” at the end unless it is necessary.

示例: Yes, sometimes I still go out with my friends when I feel tired. If I talk to them about my stressful day, I feel less anxious and more relaxed. However, if I’m completely exhausted, I prefer to stay home and rest.

× I'm doing studying abroad.

✓ I'm studying abroad.

The verb study already expresses the action, so do cannot be placed before studying here. Use the present progressive form am/is/are + verb-ing: I'm studying.

× Every time, when attending my classes I listen to in English or composition in English is really makes me tired, exhausted.

✓ Whenever I attend my classes, listening to lectures or taking composition classes in English really makes me tired and exhausted.

The original sentence has an incorrect and confusing structure. After whenever, use a complete clause with a subject and verb: whenever I attend. The activities listening to lectures and taking classes then function as the subject of makes.

× I hear explanation about study in English.

✓ I listen to an explanation about my studies in English.

A singular countable noun such as explanation normally needs an article. Use an explanation when referring to one explanation. My studies is also the natural noun phrase for the subject being studied.

× As I said for now I'm studying abroad so I listen I hear explanation about study in English then just it's it's really hard to understand it.

✓ As I said, I am studying abroad now, so I listen to explanations about my studies in English, and they are really hard to understand.

The original sentence contains repeated verbs and several incomplete or incorrectly connected clauses. Use one clear verb phrase, listen to, and connect the two main ideas with and. Commas also help separate the introductory and connecting clauses.

× I listen to explanations about my studies in English, and it is really hard to understand it.

✓ I listen to explanations about my studies in English, and they are really hard to understand.

Explanations is plural, so it cannot refer back to it. Use the plural pronoun they and the plural verb are. The pronoun them could also be used after understand: They are hard to understand or It is hard to understand them.

× I just watch Netflix for my relaxing time or listening to music.

✓ I just watch Netflix to relax or listen to music.

The two verbs connected by or should have parallel forms. Because watch is in the base form after I, use listen, not listening. To relax is also the natural infinitive expression for expressing purpose.

× I watch Netflix for my relaxing time.

✓ I watch Netflix to relax.

For my relaxing time is not the natural expression for purpose in this sentence. Use the infinitive to relax to explain why you watch Netflix.

× It makes me feel really relaxed relief.

✓ It makes me feel really relaxed and relieved.

After feel, use adjectives, not the noun relief. Relaxed describes your state after relaxing, while relieved describes the feeling of stress being reduced. The conjunction and is needed to join the two adjectives.

× Yeah, sometimes go with friends because the if my friend lists my story about how I get exhausted and or tired, it's kind of more it's a good opportunity to rebe my stress right.

✓ Yeah, I sometimes go out with my friends. If my friend listens to me talk about how exhausted or tired I feel, it is a good opportunity to relieve my stress.

The first clause is missing the subject I, and the original sentence contains several incomplete and repeated parts. The revised version uses two complete sentences with a clear subject, verb, and logical connection.

× If my friend lists my story about how I get exhausted and or tired

✓ If my friend listens to me talk about how exhausted or tired I feel

The verb listen needs the third-person singular ending -s because its subject is my friend. The form lists is a different verb and does not have the intended meaning. Use listens to.

× Because the if my friend listens to my story

✓ If my friend listens to my story

Because and if should not be combined in this structure. If introduces a condition, while because introduces a reason. Choose the conjunction that matches the intended meaning; here, if is sufficient.