疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答结构比较清晰，先直接回答了“经常累”，也给出了学习、通勤等原因以及应对方法。不过，“walking on projects”应改为“working on projects”，“combine it with by taking”表达错误，可以说“cope with it by taking”。建议使用更自然的连接方式，并避免在结尾出现语法不完整的句子。

示例: Yes, I often feel tired, especially during busy weeks. I sometimes stay up late working on projects, and I also spend about an hour commuting every day. To cope with this, I take short naps and do some light exercise in the morning.

建议: 回答基本切题，但“after I study a whole day”不够自然，应改为“after studying all day”或“after a full day of studying”。“group words”应为“group work”，“presentation”在这里应使用复数“presentations”；“take a lot of time and energy into my study”应改为“spend a lot of time and energy on my studies”。最后一句“I feel a bit tired”与前文重复，可以换成具体结果，例如“my concentration starts to drop”。

示例: I usually feel tired after studying all day. I often have several projects, group assignments, and presentations to complete, so my studies require a lot of time and energy. By the evening, my concentration starts to drop and I just want to rest.

建议: 这个回答没有充分回答“感到累时你会做什么”，而是主要说明了什么时候累以及为什么累。应先直接说明行动，例如休息、喝水、散步或听音乐，然后再补充数学作业的例子。“For example one after”应改为“For example, after finishing”；“finish my studying”更自然的说法是“finish studying”。

示例: When I feel tired, I usually take a short break and drink some water. If I have been studying for several hours, I may walk around for ten minutes or listen to music. For example, after finishing a difficult maths worksheet, I usually rest briefly before starting my next task.

建议: 回答表达了“不太会出去”的观点，但句子结构和词汇错误较多，影响理解。“science place”应改为“quiet place”，“pars”应为“parks”，“being some books”应为“reading some books”，“I really afraid”应为“I’m really afraid”，“instincts my friends emotions”可改为“affect my friends’ moods”。建议先清楚回答“No, usually not”，再说明你会独处休息，并解释原因。

示例: No, usually not. When I feel tired, I prefer to find a quiet place, such as a park or a garden, where I can be alone. I might read a book or listen to music because I do not want my bad mood to affect my friends.

× I try to combine it with by taking short naps and exercising a bit in the morning.

✓ I try to combine it with taking short naps and exercising a bit in the morning.

介词“with”后面可以接动名词（-ing形式），但不能同时使用“with”和“by”。因此应删除“by”，改为“with taking”。

× I usually feel tired after I study a whole day, you know?

✓ I usually feel tired after I study for a whole day, you know?

表示持续一段时间时，应使用“for + 时间段”，所以“a whole day”前需要加“for”。

× There are several projects, group words and presentation I need to complete, so I take a lot of time and energy into my study.

✓ There are several projects, group tasks, and presentations I need to complete, so I take a lot of time and energy into my studies.

“several”后面必须接可数名词复数，因此“presentation”应改为“presentations”。另外，这里谈论多个学习方面时，“study”可改为复数“studies”。

× There are several projects, group words and presentation I need to complete, so I take a lot of time and energy into my study.

✓ There are several projects, group tasks, and presentations I need to complete, so I put a lot of time and energy into my studies.

固定搭配是“put time and energy into something”，不能说“take time and energy into something”。因此应将“take”改为“put”。

× For example one after finishing my maths worksheet, I usually feel really tired because there are so many formulas and calculations that I need to do.

✓ For example, after finishing my maths worksheet, I usually feel really tired because there are so many formulas and calculations that I need to do.

“For example”通常放在句首，并在后面加逗号。“after finishing my maths worksheet”是时间状语，应直接放在主句前面，这样句子结构更清晰。

× I just want to find the science place like pars or garden to stay alone just being some books or listening to music.

✓ I just want to find a quiet place like a park or a garden to stay alone, just reading some books or listening to music.

第一次提到一个地方时，通常使用不定冠词“a”，所以应说“a park”和“a garden”，而不是“park”或“garden”前不加冠词。“the science place”也不符合这里的意思，应使用“a quiet place”。

× I just want to find the science place like pars or garden to stay alone just being some books or listening to music.

✓ I just want to find a quiet place like a park or a garden to stay alone, just reading some books or listening to music.

这里需要表达“读书”，应使用“reading books”。“being some books”不是正确的动词搭配；在“reading books or listening to music”中，两个动词都使用-ing形式，保持结构平行。

× I really afraid my bad mood with instincts my friends emotions.

✓ I am really afraid that my bad mood will affect my friends’ emotions.

“afraid”是形容词，前面必须有系动词“am”。因此应说“I am really afraid”。同时，完整句子还需要使用“that”引导从句，并补充谓语“will affect”。

× I really afraid my bad mood with instincts my friends emotions.

✓ I am really afraid that my bad mood will affect my friends’ emotions.

原句中的词语排列不符合英语句子结构。表达“担心我的坏心情影响朋友的情绪”时，应使用“be afraid that + 完整句子”的结构，即“I am afraid that ...”。