疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly, then give one clear reason and a brief result. Avoid repetition such as “really, really tired,” unfinished phrases, and self-correction. Use a natural expression such as “I’ve been dealing with...” and organize your ideas with a linking word like “because.”

示例: Yes, I often feel tired, mainly because I’ve been dealing with some family issues recently. At the same time, I’m trying to keep up with my studies, so I sometimes feel mentally exhausted as well.

建议: Begin with a clear time expression, such as “I usually feel tired when...” Then explain the situation in a logical order. Replace unclear phrases like “my love” with a specific expression, such as “relationship problems,” and avoid repeating “I actually” and “my.”

示例: I usually feel tired when I get home from school after a long day. This is because I have to deal with academic pressure, especially worries about my grades, as well as some problems in my relationship.

建议: State your main action clearly and avoid unfinished or confusing sentences. Use the natural phrase “get some sleep” rather than “sleep to recover my body.” You can add one specific detail about how resting helps your physical and mental health.

示例: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap or go to bed early. Getting some sleep helps my body recover and gives me a chance to clear my mind. If I’m too stressed to sleep, I listen to quiet music for a while.

建议: Use the correct structure “I don’t usually go out” and answer the question before adding a reason. Connect your ideas clearly with “because” or “also.” Avoid unclear wording such as “she’s brushing”; if you mean distance, say that your girlfriend lives far away and you do not see each other often.

示例: No, I don’t usually go out with my friends when I’m tired. I prefer to stay at home and rest because I don’t have much energy for socializing. Also, my girlfriend lives quite far away, so we usually talk online instead of meeting in person.

× Yes, I do actually. Unfortunately I feel really, really tired. This is mainly because of my family issues and I have and at the same moment, oh I mean the same period of my life, I have to deal with it and also my.

✓ Yes, I do, actually. Unfortunately, I feel really, really tired. This is mainly because of my family issues, and at the same time, I have to deal with them as well.

The original answer contains incomplete and incorrectly arranged clauses, such as I have and also my. The corrected version uses complete clauses and a clear conjunction. Use one complete subject–verb structure for each idea, and avoid restarting a sentence without finishing the previous clause.

× This is mainly because of my family issues ... I have to deal with it.

✓ This is mainly because of my family issues ... I have to deal with them.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to family issues, which is plural. Therefore, use the plural pronoun them. Check whether the noun being replaced is singular or plural before choosing a pronoun.

× I actually I usually get tired when I get home from my school after a long day because of so many problems and about my grades also my love as well.

✓ I usually get tired when I get home from school after a long day because of so many problems with my grades and my love life as well.

The adverb actually is placed awkwardly and is repeated with I. In this sentence, usually should come before the main verb get. Place frequency adverbs such as usually before the main verb, but after the verb be.

× I usually get tired when I get home from my school after a long day because of so many problems and about my grades also my love as well.

✓ I usually get tired when I get home from school after a long day because of so many problems with my grades and my love life as well.

The phrase about my grades does not correctly express problems related to grades. Use with after problems to show the subject of the problems: problems with my grades. The natural expression is also get home from school, without my, when referring to school in general.

× I don't know my but my natural reaction is just sleep to maybe recover my body, but I mean come with my body and my mental health, but it's exhausted, you know, I'm.

✓ I do not know, but my natural reaction is just to sleep so that my body and mental health can recover because they are exhausted.

The original sentence contains several incomplete clauses and abandoned phrases, including I don't know my and you know, I'm. The correction combines the ideas into a complete sentence with a clear subject, verb, and purpose clause. Plan the complete sentence before speaking, and use pauses instead of adding unfinished phrases.

× I don't know my but my natural reaction is just sleep to maybe recover my body, but I mean come with my body and my mental health, but it's exhausted.

✓ I do not know, but my natural reaction is just to sleep so that my body and mental health can recover because they are exhausted.

The pronoun they correctly refers to the plural subject my body and mental health. The original pronoun it is singular and cannot refer to both items. Use they or them when referring to two or more people or things.

× No, I'm not usually go out with my friends.

✓ No, I do not usually go out with my friends.

For a negative statement in the present simple, use do not plus the base form of the verb: do not go. The form I am not usually go is incorrect because am cannot be followed directly by the base verb go. Use I am not usually going only when describing a temporary or specific ongoing situation.

× My girlfriend lives so far from here she's brushing so we have a large distance between us.

✓ My girlfriend lives so far from here, and she is brushing, so there is a large distance between us.

Use there is to introduce a singular noun phrase such as a large distance. The original phrase we have a large distance is understandable, but there is a large distance is the more appropriate there-be structure for describing the existence of a distance.