疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a more natural topic sentence, such as “Yes, quite often.” Use “sleep quality” instead of “sleeping quality,” and say “makes my daily life much more difficult” rather than “much difficult.” The description of waking up disoriented is specific and effective, but “not knowing who I am” sounds unusually serious and may distract from the main point. You could explain the result more naturally by saying that poor sleep leaves you exhausted during the day.

示例: Yes, quite often, mainly because my sleep quality isn’t very good. I sometimes wake up in the middle of the night and feel disoriented, so I don’t get enough rest. As a result, I often feel exhausted, even when I’m doing simple tasks during the day.

建议: Answer the question directly and complete your final sentence. Avoid fillers and unnatural phrases such as “is like” and “long in distance.” Use clear expressions such as “a long-distance trip,” “time-consuming,” and “the stress of managing my schedule.” The answer already has a relevant reason, but it needs a complete result or example to sound coherent.

示例: I usually feel tired after a long-distance trip. It’s not only because the journey is time-consuming, but also because I have to manage a tight schedule. For example, catching connecting flights or trains can be quite stressful, so I normally need a good night’s sleep afterward.

建议: Start with a clear direct answer and improve the phrasing: say “doesn’t require much physical energy” instead of “is not very high demanding in physical energy.” Also, “spend time by myself” is more natural than “spend the time alone with myself.” Add a specific detail about how painting helps you recover.

示例: I usually do something relaxing, such as painting, because it doesn’t require much physical energy. It also gives me some quiet time by myself. Focusing on colours and simple designs helps me clear my mind and feel refreshed.

建议: The answer is well organized and gives a clear reason, but correct the verb form: “paint,” not “paints.” Avoid the filler “like I said,” and use “spend time by myself” instead of “spend the time with myself.” For a more natural response, use “once I feel refreshed” rather than “then after I feel refreshed.”

示例: Usually, no. Spending time with other people can drain my energy rather than restore it, so I prefer to stay at home and paint by myself. Once I feel refreshed, I’m happy to meet my friends and socialise with them.

× So that makes my daily life much difficult than others, and I often feel exhausted even when doing simple tasks.

✓ So that makes my daily life much more difficult than other people's, and I often feel exhausted even when doing simple tasks.

The comparative form of difficult is more difficult, not much difficult. Much can modify a comparative adjective, so much more difficult is correct. The comparison should also be between daily life and other people's daily lives, not between daily life and other people.

× Not only because the trip is like long in distance and time consuming but also planning for schedules like trying to catch the next plane or train is also like

✓ It is not only because the trip is long and time-consuming, but also because planning the schedule, such as trying to catch the next plane or train, is stressful.

The original sentence is incomplete and ends with like, so it does not express a complete idea. The not only ... but also structure should connect two parallel clauses. Adding It is and because makes the sentence complete and grammatically balanced.

× I usually do some relaxing activities such as painting because it's not very high demanding in physical energy and I can spend the time alone with myself.

✓ I usually do some relaxing activities, such as painting, because it is not very physically demanding and I can spend time by myself.

High demanding is not the correct adjective phrase. Physically demanding correctly uses the adverb physically to describe the type of demand. Spend time is also the natural expression here, and by myself is the usual phrase for doing something alone.

× So I would usually just, like I said, paints and spend the time with myself, then after I feel refreshed, I will spend the time with my friends.

✓ So, as I said, I would usually just paint and spend time by myself. Then, after I feel refreshed, I will spend time with my friends.

After the modal verb would, the base form of the verb must be used. Therefore, paints must be changed to paint. The sentence is also divided into two sentences to make the ideas clearer.